First line festival challenge by nos4a2no9

[nos4a2no9]

Title: Now Lie in It
Author: nos4a2no9
Pairing: Ray/Ray (with mentions of F/V, F/K and F/V/K)
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 4200 on the button
Notes: Many thanks to the wonderful jamethiel_bane for a swift and thorough beta. She saved me from POV slip-ups and talked me out of putting everything in italics. And to china_shop, who many moons ago supplied me with a prompt for a F/K/V

Comments

[etben]

*flails and DIES*

FIX THIS. FIX IT NOW PLEASE.

*flails more*

oh, boys! Ray and Ray and poor FRASER, but mostly RAY KOWALSKI: OH BOYS.

*falls completely apart*

[nos4a2no9]

*pieces you back together* Um, I'm not sure they're immediately fixable, but I think Fraser would be able to pull everyone out of this downward spiral. I have faith in the Fraser. I'm so sorry I made you flail!

[izzybeth]

oh my god.

::FREAKS OUT::

what did you DO?? they're all so broken.

i really wish i could be coherent when i leave feedback, but right now i'm all HUGE EYES and JAW ON FLOOR and ow ow OW.

because Kowalski's so ANGRY, and apparently he has a right to be, and what the hell did Vecchio do? and what the hell is Fraser's problem?

stupid stupid BOYS.

um. i hope you understand that this is all meant to be complimentary. me like fic. but ow. ::sniffle::

[nos4a2no9]

I think this may be one of those rare occaisons when "OMG what did you DO?" comes as a huge compliment :-) It's very hurty, but the situation calls for it, and maybe they won't be broken forever. Maybe Fraser will walk in that door and make them tea and they'll all talk through their issues. *nods*

You'll be happy to note that it was either this, or an F/K wedding fic. I went with the less sappy choice. And how.

[spuffyduds]

Ow.

This was so--I felt sorry for EVERYBODY. Because how could Fraser not try to make Vecchio feel better when he showed up in horrible shape, and how could RayK possibly stand it, and how could Vecchio not take it if it was offered? And beautifully written, structured, perfect.

Ow.

[nos4a2no9]

Thank you! I mean, sorry about the ow, but I'm pleased as punch you liked the writing and such. Everyone is a real mess, you're right. But...they're fixable? Maybe?

[catwalksalone]

Wow. This was so nails-across-a-blackboard painful. Fraser, the inveterate fixer of broken things, managing to break them harder.

And even though this isn't how I usually see Ray/Ray (in my head they're ultimately about saving each other, not destroying), you completely made me believe in this scenario. Testament to your awesome writing.

Owie, but worth it. Thank you.

[nos4a2no9]

Fraser, the inveterate fixer of broken things, managing to break them harder.

He's just not that great with relationships, bless his little Mountie heart.

And even though this isn't how I usually see Ray/Ray (in my head they're ultimately about saving each other, not destroying), you completely made me believe in this scenario.

Funnily enough, it's not really how I see them in my head, either. In a post-CotW context they really are about saving one another, but if things didn't go south between Fraser and Kowalski, well, I think Vecchio turning up would put things into a bit of tailspin. Sorry I broke them. Maybe I'll write some schmoopy Ray/Ray domesticity to redeem myself :-)

[slidellra]

Goddamn. This is just SPECTACULARLY upsetting. And very, very good.

ow ow ow ow ow.

[nos4a2no9]

*hands you band-aids for your ouchies* I'm going to point people in the direction of your F/K cuteness as a way of helping people recover from the upsetting-ness of this fic. Thanks for letting me know it was good, if a bit...ow.