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Ink Challenge: Mont Blanc by Ivy

Jan 07, 2005 16:08

I appear to be in a melancholy mood. There's no other way to explain this story.

Title: Mont Blanc
Author: Ivy
Words: 865
Rating: G
For the Ink challenge

( Mont Blanc )

Comments 15

pearl_o January 8 2005, 03:24:16 UTC

Mmm, this is nice.

sjkasabi January 8 2005, 05:25:54 UTC

Oh! That's gorgeous.

Love the way you root the metaphor in realistic detail.

ivy03 January 8 2005, 05:52:12 UTC

Thanks! Google is a wonderful thing. Search: Mont Blanc - bingo!

ilexa January 8 2005, 05:54:23 UTC

Its heft seemed to come from the weight of the words waiting to be unfurled from within.

Oh, I just love that.

This pen was with his father every day, carried in his breast pocket next to his heart where Benton could never be.

Ooh. That hurts. Hurts.

On his chest, over his heart, the pen had left a black stain.

Oh, that's beautifully heartbreaking.

wistful_fever January 10 2005, 02:21:38 UTC

LOVE this. Such a sweet burn.

estrella30 January 12 2005, 19:37:29 UTC

Oh wow, this is really lovely. The details in this are amazing, and the ending - yow.

Amazing job - thank you for this!