Comments | dramione_duet: Duet 02 -- <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/elektra30">elektra30</a></strong> and <strong class="lj-user"><a href="/read/user/worksofstone">worksofstone</a></strong>

ningloreth in dramione_duet

Duet 02 -- elektra30 and worksofstone

Oct 13, 2011 00:11

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Title: A Shadowed Land
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!round 3 2011!, rating: pg

Comments 18

dormiensa October 13 2011, 02:01:47 UTC

oh, the angst! this was lovely, all the more so because he finally got off his ass and did something right. wonder if he'll have enough guts to give his parents a taste of their own medicine...

elektra30 October 13 2011, 08:17:01 UTC

!!! This was utterly beautiful!! I really loved the way the whole story flowed, and especially how you described Draco's emotions - his desperation, anxiety and hurt ( ... )

ningloreth October 13 2011, 08:50:23 UTC

I loved the way you used the jewellery in this -- to show us how deeply Draco understands Hermione, and how in tune he is with her, and to make his decision to do as his parents want into something concrete.

My favourite bit, though, is this:

He waited for her to owl, to fire-call. To ask him to take her back, to say that she'd made a mistake, to say she still loved him and she was willing to wait.

That is so in-character for Draco -- just wait, and everything will turn out the way you want it to. Except it doesn't, and in the end he has to 'cross the terrifying distance' and ask her to come back.

rzzmg October 13 2011, 15:37:41 UTC

My heart ached for Hermione, and even (I admit) for Draco, despite his predicament. It's very difficult to let down your parents, and especially when they have a lot to hold over your head. It took real courage for him to approach her and to be willing to throw everything away to be with her. It took great courage for Hermione to forgive him.

You have a beautiful way of turning phrases, works. Here were some of my favourites:

Her eyes were puffy and red, her nose was running, and she was hiccuping, but she stood like a queen leading her country to war.

His will be a marriage defined by feet of parchment and cost of legal contracts, and he will buy his bride with Malfoy gold.

It was water after a drought, it was warmth in the depth of winter.

Simply beautiful work here!

justthedreams October 13 2011, 16:20:51 UTC

Oh, this was so sweet and angsty! I was so afraid Draco wouldn't come to his senses and infuriated that he wasn't fighting for her. I really enjoyed the description of the wedding gifts and their associated powers - I'd like a few of those, myself!

Great work!!