Dear Readers II,

[dracoangelica]

I just started typing this up this morning around 8:45. Its now 1:25 and here is what I've got. Anyone who cares to look on this and comment, I would appreciate it. Its from the same story that I was working on yesterday, this time with more experimentation into Stone's peer relationships. This has no really outline or plot other than the

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[pegasus2o5]

Being inside a gay guy's head... interesting... Actually, it pretty much weirds me out. But I have to admit I like Stone. He's very accessible, if that makes sense. (And I like that you made it his last name. Takes a lot of the ridiculousness out of it.) If you're going to start doing big-time Gay Love Scenes, though, warn me please? They're the main reason I'm not into fanfic. But yeah, the story is truly interesting. Are we looking at novel-length or short story?

I will definitely warn you

[dracoangelica]

I actually am NOT planning on going into major explicit deetz with that sort of thing.

Actually, now that I really step back from the story and look at it a bit, I think that the main story ISN'T with the conflict with Gerry, instead, I think its the conflict with Keisha.

I wanted to do this in 3rd person, but its turning out to be 1st person whether I like it or not.

I'm thinking this is just a short story that I might submit to my Creative Writing class...maybe. I don't know. If not, then maybe its a contest entry. I'll post up a new edit either this week or next.

That's a relief

[pegasus2o5]

I think it's a good idea to focus on Keisha. Explore the gender-identity thing with less chance of weirding people out. Deeper material than a romance story anyway.

[alucarddracula]

Definitely still rough, but MUCH better than the last draft you sent me. More detail. He's still a little emo for me, and the timing of certain events was a little off, but other than that (and the grammar/formatting problems), I'd say this scene's almost completely formed.