020. Fight

[strange_tomato]

Characters: Tank and Ripp Grunt
Subject: Sims 2 - Strangetown, Here We Come.
Wordcount: 100
Warnings: language

"So, let me guess... you got dressed up for your boyfriend?"

Ripp just looked at him for a moment, willing him to die.

"Fuck you."

"Nice comeback."

"I know the concept of friendship is pretty fucking new to you, Tank, but -"

"I just don't get

Comments

[strange_tomato]

It's a concerned question, not a command. I think it would make more sense if I add more description, which I likely will if I use this. I could describe that he looks nervous, or even just show that with the image.

Some context would probably make it all make a bit more sense too. They never really say what they are talking about here, so it's probably confusing, as I now realize.

[strange_tomato]

I agree. I'm probably trying to squeeze in way too much for a mere 100 words, but I have been grappling with this scene, and I wanted to give it a try. To give this some context, they are going to be questioned by the military about the General's disappearance, and they suspect that the conversation will involve the Smith family in some way (which is also the reason that Ripp got dressed up in his Sunday best).

*snort* A fart in church. Yeah, I don't think that Ripp would dare to command Tank like that, even in his bolder moments. He'd know that it wouldn't get him anywhere, since Tank would probably react by doing the opposite.

[iceraptoress]

I know you squeezed it down to 100 words (and YAY! for you!), but I was actually a little confused by who said "You're not going to say anything, are you?" and didn't realize it was Ripp until the last sentence. I thought it was Tank, since the line proceeding it was about Tank.

Otherwise, lovely little piece! The dialoge does the job of getting across how they both feel as they go back and forth.

[strange_tomato]

Yeah, I see that. You're totally right. I would normally tack a description of Ripp onto the end of his sentence there, or at least a "Ripp said". Trying to cram this all into 100 words was not a great idea, but I can get really obsessive about stuff like that (my mildly OCD tendencies are showing).

I'll flesh this out better when I work it into the next chapter. Thanks for pointing that out!

[music_simbol]

Well, I really want to what led to this convo. Course, with only 100 words, there's not much room to wiggle.

However, seeing these two characters talk is rare, but what they say does sound like things they would so to each other. God, I just wish there was room for more!!!

[strange_tomato]

I know. There was no room for any real detail, was there? So it ends up being mysterious (and confusing *snicker*).

They really don't say much to each other, at least not anything of any consequence. It's mostly taunts and bullshit, which seems realistic for brothers to me (and especially these two).

You'll get more in the next chapter, if I ever get through the creative block I'm in right now (and this drabble did help a little).

[kin_thalas]

That´s why I don´t care that much about to get exactly 100 words. I´d love to get more informations about it, but I know, it´s a drabble.
But I SO want to know more!!!

[strange_tomato]

I just have to make it exactly 100 words, and I wish I was less insane about it. (Less insanity all around would be nice.)

This scene is really just too long for a drabble. You'll have to check out my next chapter to get the full-length version. I could adjust it here, but it is what it is. I'm not going to bother.