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SPN Fic: Home Front (Gen, PG)

Feb 12, 2008 19:17

Title: Home Front
Author: dotfic
Rating: Gen, PG, preseries
Word count: 3,300
Characters: Ellen, wee!Jo
Disclaimer: Harvelle's Roadhouse and characters are the property of Eric Kripke and The CW.

a/n: Written for the halfamoon 14 day challenge. Beta by the sharp-eyed innie_darling.

( Ellen was no coward, but as the door shut behind Bill she almost ran after him. )

halfamoon, supernatural fanfic

Comments 28

minim_calibre February 13 2008, 00:45:55 UTC

Very, very cool.

dotfic February 19 2008, 02:47:10 UTC

Thank you! Ellen is very cool. *g*

cofax7 February 13 2008, 00:52:54 UTC

Go Ellen Go!

Awesome.

dotfic February 19 2008, 02:48:02 UTC

Thank you! :D

iamstealthyone February 13 2008, 01:24:35 UTC

Nicely done. Good Ellen voice, and I like how you can see the adult Jo will become in the Jo you wrote for this story. I also like how this seems like it’s just going to be a look at how Ellen and Jo cope in Bill’s absence but becomes something much more.

Favorite lines:

As another storm rolled in, Bill went, like a force of nature himself.

Nicely phrased.

She was staring at the closed door with a red and a silver crayon clutched in her small hand, as if the soles of her Keds were glued to the floorboards.

Poor, bereft Jo. *hugs her*

Her fingers closed around Jo's, around the waxy crayons,

Good detail.

She and Jo had the place to themselves this evening, and she missed the murmur of conversation from the hunters, the clack of pool balls, laughter and insults.

Good details.

Jo hugged her hard, missing her father; normally Jo was never that clingy with her. Pushing the faint twinge of hurt away,*hugs Ellen* It’s never fun when one of your kids shows a preference for the other parent. Yeah, it comes with the territory, ( ... )

dotfic February 19 2008, 03:55:08 UTC

I really enjoyed writing wee!Jo, I imagine her as being the mini-Bill, very much his daughter, with Ellen feeling like the third wheel.

Thank you! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this!

vee_fic February 13 2008, 02:00:11 UTC

Oh, nice. Good work!

dotfic February 19 2008, 03:55:23 UTC

Thank you! I'm glad you liked. :)

yourlibrarian February 13 2008, 02:25:48 UTC

Bill had drilled both Ellen and Jo on that password business; there were things that could imitate humans, steal their shape or their voices. Ellen was pretty sure a black dog couldn't do that - pretty sure - but she wasn't going to take chances.

I love that detail. Though apparently the shapeshifters get their thoughts too, but probably not that quickly.

“Aw, Bill, don't you worry none. You'll still get the satisfaction of cleaning that thing's remains out of our place.”

“What?” His voice went low and sharp in her ear.

Ellen took in a long, deep breath and let it out. “It came here. I shot it. There's a big mess. I'm leavin' most of it for you, honey.”

Heh! As Buffy would say, the men dig the graves and the women birth the babies :D

dotfic February 19 2008, 03:57:45 UTC

Though apparently the shapeshifters get their thoughts too, but probably not that quickly.

That's okay, I can hand-wave an explanation -- Bill hadn't had much direct confrontation with shapeshifters, only knew about them. So he was lacking a few pertinent details. *koff* Yeah! I meant to do that!

Thanks! Yep, Bill gets to do the clean-up, Ellen does the slayage this time (I think a lot of their marriage, it was the other way around, and she spent a lot of time cleaning blood off her husband and stitching him up).