I think you already know that I'm very happy that you're writing this again. Heh. I'm obsessed with one of your characters after all XP
Anyway, I REALLY like this snippet. Maybe because it gave me more insight regarding Yukichi. For the longest time, Yukichi's been sort of overshadowed by Kira in my personal perspective and this chapter sort of started to make him stand out again. Hehe.
The real big reason why I like this though is the perspective and the ending. I liked how the whole ending scene with the boy and the truck played out with Yukichi's thoughts. I think writing it in his perspective allowed the different emotions in the scene - urgency, strangeness, etc - to be conveyed better to the readers.
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Anyway, I REALLY like this snippet. Maybe because it gave me more insight regarding Yukichi. For the longest time, Yukichi's been sort of overshadowed by Kira in my personal perspective and this chapter sort of started to make him stand out again. Hehe.
The real big reason why I like this though is the perspective and the ending. I liked how the whole ending scene with the boy and the truck played out with Yukichi's thoughts. I think writing it in his perspective allowed the different emotions in the scene - urgency, strangeness, etc - to be conveyed better to the readers.
Nice job :)
I can't wait for the next part XD XD
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