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Fic: The Mirror Cracked From Side to Side PG-13

Oct 08, 2005 22:55

Title: The Mirror Cracked From Side to Side
Author: dora_the_nymphCharacters: Petunia/James ( Read more... )

petunia/james, fic, petunia, james

Comments 23

rayvyn2k October 8 2005, 22:28:35 UTC

I like this fic, the summary and the flashback scene. I'm so happy that you weren't too busy to write it!

dora_the_nymph October 8 2005, 22:32:46 UTC

Oh yay! I'm glad you liked it. I just realised this is my first het fic (I have a couple of drabbles I think, but no het. This means I have done het, slash, f-slash and gen!

Oh, and I was to busy to write it, but I decided to do it anyway. Sometimes you just need to.

aerynstales October 8 2005, 22:49:52 UTC

Very nice! I liked the dialogue and the summary! :D

However, one little crit? I had a hard time figuring out at first who was talking in the dialogue. Was it Petunia or James...

Is there perhaps a way to make this clearer...just at the start? Just as a launchpad?

Anyhoo, I did really like this. Kudos, gal!

dora_the_nymph October 9 2005, 20:38:36 UTC

However, one little crit? I had a hard time figuring out at first who was talking in the dialogue. Was it Petunia or James...

It was James all the way until 'what are you doing here'. I'll have to think about that.

Glad you liked!

busaikko October 8 2005, 23:58:11 UTC

EEEE! Beautiful, really really beautiful. So many lines I like:

She was rarely allowed fury when the boy was not around.

Didn’t they always say that ignorance is bliss? Petunia was educated enough to know that that was true.

Petunia is a cipher to me, always has been: I've heard some theories that her housekeeping is some kind of latent magic ability; but I like the idea of her going cold-turkey for a drug she'll never have again... chilling and bitter and just gorgeous.

And, may I add, Mine all Mine! Love you!

dora_the_nymph October 9 2005, 20:40:28 UTC

Oh, I'm so very glad you liked it. If you hadn't there would have been no point!

Honestly I never really though about Petunia all that much, but seeing your prompt this just came into my brain!

Do you mind me posting it other places?

busaikko October 9 2005, 21:16:21 UTC

Oh, please post it other places! I've already sent my flist the link, but more people should definately read it!

snegurochka_lee October 9 2005, 00:27:22 UTC

Ooh, cool pairing! I like the weaving of flashback lines and real-time memory. Very powerful. :)

*runs back to own ficlet*

dora_the_nymph October 9 2005, 20:42:54 UTC

Oh, yay. Praise from you always causes extreme bouncing!

agnes_bean October 9 2005, 01:12:39 UTC

Wow. This is really powerful. A really interesting pairing and I love how you did it, weaving the past and the present. The use of only dialogue for the flashbacks works really well, and I ADORE that you had James telling her about Azkaban. It’s just…perfect. It kind of pulls this all together and gives it a definite place in canon. Wonderful, wonderful work.

dora_the_nymph October 9 2005, 20:44:18 UTC

just…perfect. It kind of pulls this all together and gives it a definite place in canon.

I really wanted to have her being told that in this, it was my only definate aim in this story.

Thank you so much for your review!