Comments | donteatacowman: First draft--story start

donteatacowman

First draft--story start

Aug 10, 2009 15:40

Owned by me. No plagiarism, please. :)

Mina rubbed the fabric between her fingers. It was smooth, and warmed by her body heat. Her palms were a little sweaty but not enough to even dampen the shirt in her hands. She held it up to her body appraisingly. "So what do you think?"
"It's a good look for you," the voice said more confidently than she ( Read more... )

insanity, unfinished, random, villainy, original fiction, evil

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jamie55 August 11 2009, 02:07:46 UTC

I'm not gonna lie to you Donne.
I am confused. 0_o Please explain?

So, it's some sort of AU - where evil is ... natural? And I like how casual that feels,
>"Ooh, look, they have a sale on death rays!"
haha,
But I'm not sure...

Like is Mina hearing a voice 'cause she's nuts or is this some sort of experiment gone wrong?
She kinda reminds me of Penny if Dr Horrible - not Billy - got stuck in her head. ^^ So, interesting...

donteatacowman August 11 2009, 02:27:22 UTC

All right, all right. Eventually I'd try to get this across in exposition, but I'm not sure how long this'll last ( ... )

jamie55 August 11 2009, 03:45:46 UTC

Hmm... Strange, I'll venture that her "strange voice" - Xeno - has to do with her mom's power, or something..

Anyways. It's pretty good. =)

donteatacowman August 11 2009, 15:28:25 UTC

Right!

Thanks. I know, a lot of background for a very short thing. xD