"Stirring an Affection" by Enemytosleep [Drabble #126]

[enemytosleep]

Title: Stirring an Affection
Author: enemytosleep

Word Count: 400
Rating: PG
Characters: Kagome, Sesshoumaru
Prompt: dokuga_contest - Yearn

Summary: Kagome's plight peaks his interest.

Warnings: a bit of after-battle gore, angst
Notes: The word count needing to be exact in order to qualify makes me nervous since each word counter can read differently. This is

Comments

[a_mystic_lady]

Nice take on the prompt. You can just feel the emotion in her, and the slight indefernce in him. Nice job.

[a_mystic_lady]

It doesn't let you edit your comments.
*indifference

[enemytosleep]

Yeah, sometimes I am tempted to upgrade to a paid account so I can edit my comments, but I'm always too cheap in the end. XD

Anyway, thanks for reading my doom!bunny. I'm glad I could get that flood of emotion right (and Sesshoumaru is nearly always so reserved and in his own head). :D

[hedda_1]

Often, when the present tense is used, the authors skip into past tense by default. You did not. :)

The emotions are really displayed well. Nice one!

[enemytosleep]

I don't really mess with present tense much, but it had more urgency this way, I thought. Glad I didn't goof! ;) And thank you, I'm glad I could get Kagome's panic rightly portrayed. :3

[paynesgrey]

Oh very interesting, love the suspense in this. Fantastic work!

[enemytosleep]

Thanks! :D