Comments | dodger_winslow: SPN Fic: To Everything A Season (Pt 2/4, Gen/Het, R)

dodger_winslow

SPN Fic: To Everything A Season (Pt 2/4, Gen/Het, R)

Jul 31, 2006 04:07

Edit: Fine, LJ won't let me post it in one chunk, so part 2 is going up in two chunks.

Okay, y'all. I may have mentioned to a few people that the end of this think kind of detonated on me during the final polish, so I've been wigging out a bit on how to end something I thought was over, and it has thrown me a wee bit behind in my original schedule.

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spn fic, john, post-series, sam, dean, chart: first times

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starhawk2005 July 31 2006, 11:37:50 UTC

without any need to take out insurance in case of accidental ass printage

*lol*

And of course Sammy does so well as a lawyer. He's psychic. ;)

something Dean knew, again, from first hand experience

Of course!

So he thinks you can just put ‘Dude’ on it, and somebody will know how to find you

TEH CUTE, heheh.

dodger_winslow July 31 2006, 12:39:21 UTC

:D

I've had that "fear of sitting" thing before. Cause, like, my ass does not carry insurance. LOL

lady_octavia July 31 2006, 13:00:37 UTC

LOVE Dean telling his nephew that he hunts werewolves with Wolvie in the Yukon!! And the letter -so sweet I'm with Sam on wanting to know what it said though...

The xbox in the office is awesome. Glad Sammy doesn't reserve his perverse streak for John -and being out to everyone but Dean and his son (and John -probably so he could bite his head off).

he would have preferred Sam marry a werewolf over Meredith, and Dad would have preferred Sam turn into a werewolf over marrying Meredith so brilliant! though I suppose since she doesn't hate Dean (anymore) she might be slightly better than a werewolf... (naw, on second thought...)

The memory about the spagetti and the comparision to modern art are hillarious!

In his head, you’re kind of like Santa Clause, but with a cooler car. So he thinks you can just put ‘Dude’ on it, and somebody will know how to find you This is soooooo perfect, Dean on level with Santa, being so amazing that the universe must know where to find him at all times, and the simple confidence and adoration of his ( ... )

dodger_winslow July 31 2006, 13:09:04 UTC

:D I'm tickled the whole nephew thing is working for you. Garrison just stole my heart the same way Sammy stole it in Freaks and Monsters. And I don't even LIKE kids that much normally. LOL ( ... )

lady_octavia July 31 2006, 13:30:32 UTC

I'm throughly enjoying hating her, which works because I really like the other two women ('cause now I've read part 3...)

... more reasons to hate Meredith?! yeah!...

okay so he doesn't really recall him, but his early bleeriness reflects on a collicy Sammy... And YEAH for remembering Dean (and yeah also for feeling like shit about it -even if for the wrong reasons, I love John, but sometimes he needs to feel just how much he hurts Dean).

(oh and have I mentioned before how much I love that I am not the only person for whom frakking is part of everyday speech!!)

dodger_winslow July 31 2006, 13:48:25 UTC

Oh, absolutely, Joh will feel how much he has hurt Dean. In fact, the whole re-- oh, wait, I can't tell you that yet. LOL

I had a hell of a lot of fun though, working in Mary and Sammy and Dean to his core persona and perceptions on life without havin him actually REMEMBER them though. And Julie just rocks my boat that she realizes Mary wore white and that John's appreciation for the hollow of her throat had to do with his life with Mary, not just a random appreciation for a random place on a random woman's body.

LOL @ frakkin. You would not believe how much shit I catch for that. I spend a LOT of time hanging out with the Deadwoodianly inclined, so I have actually been known to use "frakkin" and "cocksucker" in the same sentence ... something which amuses my DW buddies to no frakkin end.

That and the fact that "grok" is also part of my vocabulary, and has been for 20 years. :D

embroiderama July 31 2006, 22:50:56 UTC

Oh, man, my excitement at seeing these story parts sitting atop my friends list can only be measured by the volume of squeeage. Sadly, I hadn't gotten up early enough to read them before work, but I took them with me, and they kept me pleasantly distracted as I stole minutes to read through the first half of the day. There's so much to love in here--Dean's snarky thoughts about the office, Sam's happiness at seeing Dean, John struggling to be happy in his new life. Actually, I also love drunk!John's berating of Sam's stuck-up wife because, yeah, I totally don't like her, and that's the kind of thing that you need a drunk family member to verbalize for you. (Preferably not in front of the kids, though. I know how scary that can be. Yikes.) Anyway, yay, on to comment on part three.

dodger_winslow August 2 2006, 03:49:51 UTC

Thank you! *happy dancing that I made someone squee!*

I tell you, the drunk!John stuff hackles me up big-time. The image of both Sam and Dean physcially carrying him to his truck while he's bellowing obscenities back at Meredith in the house hits a little too close to your icon for me ... but it was something I could see in him, so it needed to go there.

But Dean snarking about the office ... I think I've seen a few couches in my day that I'd be intimidated to sit on for fear of ass printage, so I could relate. LOL

tabaqui August 2 2006, 00:49:19 UTC

*sniffle*
Dean and Sam not together.
*sniffle*
Dean all *hurty* and Sam all hurty and...and...
John!
Hurty!
*sniffle*

Yeah, that's all i got. 'Cept i luffed it hardcore.

dodger_winslow August 2 2006, 03:51:52 UTC

LOL. That's pretty much the core of it. Hurty, hurty and more hurty. Kinda scary when this is what we do to the characters we LOVE, eh? LOL. I can imagine Sam breathing a small sigh of relief that he's #3 on the list so I can hopefully have expended most of my angst potential on #1 and #2 by the time I get down to him.

tabaqui August 2 2006, 15:06:12 UTC

Well, okay, but that's *you*. Because you are an evol hooor. *I* make sure my boys are happy in the end 'cause...
My boys!
*clings to them*

dotfic August 3 2006, 22:45:14 UTC

Yup. Geek Boy Sammy had his very own library, and he kept it at the office because he had another one just like it at home.

I loved this detail, and the other ways you show a Sam who has changed so much and yet who is still just Sam.

Dean was happy for her, in a jealous kind of way. She deserved someone nice, and the girls deserved someone who wouldn’t be off hunting poltergeists when they needed him to help with their homework, or tuck them into bed.

Awwww, Dean.

"Reminds me of that time you tried to cook spaghetti for me and Dad in Cincinnati. Remember? We were out all night, tracking that ka’aliki demon, and came back to find you sacked out on the floor of that motel kitchenette

Wonderful story, just the story itself is adorable, and also how Dean keeps using it to deflect in that scene.

"He hasn’t done anything. He hasn’t been home for a while."

The echo of it was familiar. Too familiar.

Oooh. I like the echo.

Great dialogue between Sam and Dean.

And it’s only gotten worse since we killed the demon. He doesn’t have ( ... )

dodger_winslow August 4 2006, 04:57:23 UTC

Thanks so much for your feedback! I really appreciate it when someone takes the time to leave such detail, both what worked and what didn't. You rock!

Wonderful story, just the story itself is adorable, and also how Dean keeps using it to deflect in that scene.

I think probably the most fun I've had with this story is in coming up with different stories from their lives for the different characters to reference in ways like this ... it's all about Dean trying not to jump immediately into a "got a problem with dad" dynamic, but the story itself has to ring true, too. That was a BLAST to do.

This kind of thing fascinates me--when a character is on a single-minded quest for so long succeeds, what can they hold onto when it's over? So I get that John would unravel.Thinking it might go this way came in large part from some of the things John said in DMB, Salvation and DT. It seemed almost as if he was determined NOT to survive this confrontation. Which, of course, begs the questions, what if you do? And given how much of his life has ( ... )

dodger_winslow August 4 2006, 05:04:14 UTC

continued ...

My only query would be if drunk John isn't a bit too much, because you have him really hitting such an extreme low before he gets amnesia and finds happiness, that it makes him getting the happiness too easy a contrast. His apathy and depression might have been enough. But I do like what you did with the drunken John, you didn't pull any punches and if he did turn to drinking that way, this is probably what would happen.I have to cop to a bit of a personal agenda in telling this particular story (*grin*) as taking John to the no man's land of self destruction by alcohol was the drive behind writing it. Being a dynamic with which I am very familiar, I was intrigued by how it would manifest itself in the John, Dean and Sam dynamic, especially in terms of how it might manifest of John's drinking was aimed at self destructing, not self medicating or simply a physical addiction; and if Dean wouldn't/couldn't step off and let that happen, even if it meant destoying his life trying to stop it ( ... )

dotfic August 4 2006, 12:18:37 UTC

Because he's not stepping away from a man who can't get his drinking under control. He's stepping away from a man he loves who has a gun to his head. And Dean can't do that, even if it means going down with John, too.

That does put a different spin on it. I'm not sure why, but I got from it "drinking out of control"--I didn't think of it as a deliberate thing, just part of the apathy/loss of meaning. That may not be a problem in the story, just what I assigned, because the suicide angle works. I really love the way you've fit Dean into that equation. It's heartbreaking and true to character; Dean would throw himself in front of a figurative bullet for John (or Sam), no matter where Dean is in life. Sam then seems to be trying to save Dean from going down trying to save John.

It's possibly that it would have been clearer with part 4 (this is part of why I hardly ever read WIP's...but I seem to break that rule a lot lately! :)

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