This was definitely not what I was expecting, but it is amazing all the same! The sadness...the prose...the way you reveal the story so slowly... Beautiful.
You are so good at heartbreak, Amelie! All the anger and doubt come across so vividly, so realistically. I think you ought to continue the story. I would love to see how Hermione would handle the next moment(s).
I was fortunate enough to read this before posting, but am so glad that it was ultimately my treat! Thank you!!!
It is HILARIOUS that it ended up being your treat-- but I'm so glad that you enjoyed it all the same! Much love and many thanks (again) for your help! =) You're the best!
Wow. I'm not even sure quite what to say. This was a very intense and raw story that has left me with a lot of questions, a brief look at something that happened between two people and its aftermath-- but only the shadows of the event, with the details not really fleshed out and clear. It feels like cobwebs-- ethereal and insubstantial, the outlines of a story, ghostly. But the pain and love, the anger and heartbreak, are clear.
Thank you so much for your thoughtful review! I'm happy to hear that you felt that I effectively captured the essence of the prompt-- and hopefully you didn't feel as though the ficlet left you with TOO many questions!
You know, I've just now reread the story, as well as others' reactions to it, and I have to ask: are we meant to understand that Ron deliberately hid the angel? Or just heedlessly put it in the attic? And how could Hermione not know that the angel had indeed come back to her? How did she miss that? Is kansol_encore right in assuming that Ron's actions were duplicitous? That "And all at once she understood" is such a tricky little bugger of a sentence, because it suggests so many possible ways of interpreting it.
I suppose all these questions really are irrelevant, ultimately, compared to the larger picture of loss and misunderstanding, miscommunications and terrible heartbreak you've painted so beautifully.
I did notice that readers had interpreted the story in different ways (which is fine, of course!); but yes, my intention was for Ron to have deliberately hidden the angel. I know that I never quite spelled it out, but that was the meaning behind the sentence: How careless of Ron, she thought, to leave the crystal lying about undisguised. Hermione was unaware of the angel's return because Ron had intercepted it-- hence the uncomfortable tension in her moment with Draco in the apothecary (where both of them mistakenly believe that they've been rejected by the other). Later, when she comments that "It was the one book she’d thought Ron would never read," the implication was meant to be that she's now questioning whether Ron has, in fact, opened the book-- and found what was hidden inside.
I'm extremely curious to know, however, how you interpreted the story! Did any of this come across?? What did you initially think had had happened? (And can I ask what you originally took the "And then, all at once, she understood" to mean?)
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I was fortunate enough to read this before posting, but am so glad that it was ultimately my treat! Thank you!!!
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I suppose all these questions really are irrelevant, ultimately, compared to the larger picture of loss and misunderstanding, miscommunications and terrible heartbreak you've painted so beautifully.
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I'm extremely curious to know, however, how you interpreted the story! Did any of this come across?? What did you initially think had had happened? (And can I ask what you originally took the "And then, all at once, she understood" to mean?)
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