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my first fan fic

Nov 28, 2008 11:37

Title: Yet to be titled Fanfic #1 part 1
Author: shnookies00
Rating: M+15- adult content- in line with the show
Word Count: 3644
Summary: a week away on a business conference reap....
TBC- if you like it got a few more 'chapters'
UPDATED: CHAPTER 1
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pair: george/mason, › by: shnookies00, character: mason, - fanfiction -, [pov]: third person, › series: untitled, character: george, [length]: serial, [pov]: first person, [rating]: ›ma, pair: [het]

Comments 2

hadeschild November 28 2008, 23:31:22 UTC

I really enjoyed this, you have a definite ear for dialogue and the monologues from the show.

Just as a recommendation, though, I would try to find yourself a good beta. When I'm in a bad mood (and many readers just as a general rule) won't read when there's as many small grammar, spelling and accuracies issues as you had here. Please don't take this personally, I really did like it, just a peice of advice as a fellow author.

thanx shnookies00 November 29 2008, 02:13:46 UTC

hey thanks for the feedback, ive change some bits and pieces so it flows a bit better- i realized it jumped really badly from first to third person and i fixed some spelling- added a new chapter as well
i havent written anything since highschool a few years ago now so im pretty rusty
keep the fb coming