Snowflake Step Five

[dldzioba]

5. I need to write a page synopsis for each character. I'm essentially writing the story as they see it from their POVs. This is the first of four.

Comments

[ceruleanflow]

it sounds pretty good, but I want to hear more about how he feels about the situation. Since he's older, maybe he might have some fatherly wisdom, and it he doesn't like Sophie, I want to hear it more. Otherwise, good job.

[reliantfc3]

I agree with the above, but yeah, a good start

[rallymama]

Sophie's bit of "wisdom" is such an obvious, fundamental truth that it doesn't work for me as the climax of the story. How do things change after she points this out? Do the Loewandowskis disseminate this to others? What is the impact on society and science and politics?

The relationship parts work, and I think nchan makes a good point.