Promptfic: Pillow Talk

[dixielee01]

Fandoms: Dukes of Hazzard, Avengers
Pairings: none directly mentioned; assumption of Tony/Pepper
Rating: PG (for a little language)
Prompts: afternoon, pillow talk
A/N: Okay, I had one idea when I first read the prompts, a different idea when I thought about them again this morning... and what actually came out when I started typing was something else

Comments

[newdf]

Very different thoughts here. And interesting not-quite-script format you worked with. The boys, of course, are adorable. Bo's worried, too tangled to even admit to himself until Luke works through them with him, and Luke's seemingly half-hearted participation. (But we know you care enough to stay up as long as he needs you to, Luke.)

The Avengers one, again, only emotion. But the not-quite-script format really really works here. All the pictures are left to the readers' mind and in this case they are colorful and vivid. Very very interesting.

ETA: I did write on this same prompt -- my results were quite different.

[dixielee01]

It kind of formed itself into not-quite-script format. I wasn't entirely sure what it was doing at first, but it sort of developed and clarified as I went on. It felt a bit different, even clearer, in the Avengers one... I think maybe it delineated sharper because it was a soliloquy of sorts? That the breaks kind of defined the paragraphs? In both snippets it was interesting to just have sounds describe... well, everything. Like an audio recording, instead of video, managing to be vivid anyway. It was different, and kind of fun.

I'll have to go read yours.

[newdf]

I felt like it was clearer in the Avengers one, too. But I can't say that it's not just that the Avengers one was more serious (and yes, teh soliloquy). I mean, you quickly get pulled into the narrator's emotions on that one, so it becomes intense. Whereas the Dukes one is more humorous and leaves you more headspace to notice the different style.

You know, I used to work with people who were blind or visually impaired. Some had lost their sight, but some had never had it. I wish that I could have made them all write a few descriptive paragraphs (but this was not at all what the job was about) just to see how they differed from what I would write. Well, and in some cases the writing would have been a good exercise because some of them needed to believe they were still good at *something* and to recognize that some things didn't require sight to be done. But alas. That was then and now I'm in the Midwest, waiting for opening night and scratching my chigger bites.

[dixielee01]

It *was* emotionally intense. I think that's probably why it came to me so clearly. The narrator, after all, is the one member of the team that made a point of not *liking* Phil Coulson - for example the first line here reflects on a moment early in the movie where he got jealous cause Coulson and his partner (she's more than girlfriend) were on a first name basis and he insisted that Coulson's first name was "Agent", not "Phil" - but then he turned around and became the one to explode into facing the bad guy one on one in Phil's name when they all were told he was dead. So, it really was a tangle of emotions to work with. Fascinating viewpoint to write out.

That would have been a great thing, I think, if you could have done the writing exercise with the impaired. That would be very interesting; I bet it all would be sounds and words too...

Just curious, but I don't recall you saying... why did you move, anyway?