The Burden of Proof (1/1)interrobamAugust 19 2012, 03:49:43 UTC
(A/N: I might have made this way darker than you expected... I hope you still like it. Warning for non-con.)
The Burden of Proof She didn't say yes, but she didn't say no. She didn't resist, and if it were any other girl: Isabella or Gretchen, he would have known not to cross that line. But it was Vanessa, maddening Vanessa with that smirk on her face and those leather boots, in that OWCA cell. It was her that drove him out of his mind with guilt and anger, that had ruined everything
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Re: The Burden of Proof (1/1) - OP Here
anonymous
August 20 2012, 03:25:56 UTC
That was FANTASTIC!!!! OMG!! I love this! When I posted this prompt originally, I envisioned something a bit more explicit...but MAN was I wrong!! Anything more explicit would have ruined the tone of the piece.
You captured Ferb's characteristic silence perfectly. And this line... he knew, with a feeling like the itch of a phantom limb, that if Phineas were there he would have had the strength to walk away...literally had me gasping aloud, interpreting it as Phineas being dead? And probably at Vanessa's hands? The possibilities here hinted at but left in shadows are just too delicious!
My god, but this is awesome! I am so putting this on my Kindle to read over and over! THANK YOU!!!!!!
Re: The Burden of Proof (1/1) - OP HereinterrobamAugust 20 2012, 04:19:54 UTC
I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! I did imagine Phineas as being dead by Vanessa's hands, but I decided to leave it ambiguous, like what happened to Perry. I'm glad you picked up on the hints I laid out: there's a whole dark AU at the edge of this fic. I am thrilled to know you will be reading this over and over!
Re: The Burden of Proof (1/1) - Still OP Here(decloaked)interrobamAugust 20 2012, 13:17:58 UTC
Eh, I might write other P&F darkfics within this universe, but I don't really have an interest in writing an expository story. It's less fun to just spell something out.
As for Ferb's motives, I spent some time trying to figure out what would have to happen to him before he would rape someone. I think he went into the situation thinking he would be making them "even" somehow, but afterwards realized he hadn't accomplished anything but making his life and Vanessa even more screwed up.
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The Burden of Proof She didn't say yes, but she didn't say no. She didn't resist, and if it were any other girl: Isabella or Gretchen, he would have known not to cross that line. But it was Vanessa, maddening Vanessa with that smirk on her face and those leather boots, in that OWCA cell. It was her that drove him out of his mind with guilt and anger, that had ruined everything ( ... )
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You captured Ferb's characteristic silence perfectly. And this line... he knew, with a feeling like the itch of a phantom limb, that if Phineas were there he would have had the strength to walk away...literally had me gasping aloud, interpreting it as Phineas being dead? And probably at Vanessa's hands? The possibilities here hinted at but left in shadows are just too delicious!
My god, but this is awesome! I am so putting this on my Kindle to read over and over! THANK YOU!!!!!!
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As for Ferb's motives, I spent some time trying to figure out what would have to happen to him before he would rape someone. I think he went into the situation thinking he would be making them "even" somehow, but afterwards realized he hadn't accomplished anything but making his life and Vanessa even more screwed up.
I'm glad you were so happy with my fill!
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