picture challenge

[loyseofverlaine]

Hi everybody! Newby popping in here with my first contribution, a drabble

Comments

[myrebelcat]

Oh... I like this!

I particularly like how we don't need to know it's Doyle who is the artist, because it's unmistakable who he's talking about. Bodie *does* get that sulky spoiled look sometimes, when the camera isn't complimenting him. And he can look like a thug. But that back... I'm in love with Bodie's back, I think. The line of the shoulders carving down to the hips is very striking.

And of course with your last line I now have a wonderful image in my head of Doyle tossing out a comment like that just when Bodie's got no opportunity to look him in the eye, and then the expression of endearing bewilderment on Bodie's face when he realizes he's just been complimented and not even in a backhanded kind of way. Nice! :-)

[loyseofverlaine]

Thanks, Rebel. I'm quite fond of watching Bodie walk away too

And I think this is the first comment I've ever gotten that's longer than the actual story

[solosundance]

Lovely drabble! Particularly liked simple strong lines that carry the weight of life and death with grace ... really nice line that sums up Bodie beautifully, the old tough'n'tender thing that he is (a bit, sometimes *g*)

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you. Glad you liked it

[callistosh65]

Nice to see a drabble for the challenge - and what a good one it is too! Deadly competency can be beautiful. Loved this line, Bodie distilled beautifully to five words; just what a drabble should do. Thanks for posting this up.

[loyseofverlaine]

Thanks. Always have have liked my guys tall dark and mean

[callistosh65]

Y'know.. I only just made the meandthee connection, my friend. Sorry, brain is kind of sleep deprived these days. So, let me give you an extra squee and a handclap, Verlaine, as I usher you gleefully thru' the Pros door of writing - more please!

[loyseofverlaine]

I do kind of sneak under the radar, LOL

[heliophile_oxon]

I like this very much, but (I don't know if you had this in mind) it strikes me as a little sad; the line I can only say stuff like that when he can't see my face makes me think that Doyle may not just be out of Bodie's line of sight but out of earshot altogether - that maybe he's saying this to himself alone, because he can't say it to Bodie. But Bodie will suss him out sooner or later ... thank you for this!

[loyseofverlaine]

Thanks for the nice comment. My take on the "can only say stuff like that when he can't see my face" wasn't so bleak - more the typical guy thing that "real men don't say nice things about each other". *g* After all, somebody might blush or something.

[sc_fossil]

Oh, Verlaine, nice! Quite heart=tugging in just a few words. It is a bit sad, but in a good way. Thanks! (kat dances off happily, chanting: Verlaine's writing Pros...)

[loyseofverlaine]

Thanks, Kat. This is all your fault, you know. If you hadn't got me going on those curls . . . ah, well. hooked now.

[sc_fossil]

It is my mission in life to drag as many people into Pros as I did into Sentinel. I think I have a lot more work to do. Now please write me a pretty story. You can even x-over them with S&H if it makes you feel more at home.