Fic: Pub Crawling

[myrebelcat]

I couldn't resist. I had to post this story today. It's Friday the Thirteenth!

Hopefully that's a good omen. But if there are any glitches in this story it's entirely my fault for not sending it back to Slanted Light for a final read.

Comments

[sc_fossil]

Very entertaining, Rebel. I enjoyed this. This line really made me smile:

“Fine,” said Doyle, watching the ambulance men take Jane’s mother away on a stretcher. “Next time I’ll put the bullet through you. Will that make you happy?”

Thanks!

[myrebelcat]

You're welcome! :-)

I think one of the funniest bits from the series, imo, was the two of them yelling at each other at the end of Killer with a Long Arm, with the poor family still tied up in the other room, listening. I like to imagine that wasn't the first time they'd had that kind of argument, either.

[sc_fossil]

I love that scene, with the hitch in Doyle's voice. You did a fine job setting the same tone.

[faramir_boromir]

I enjoyed this very much. I particularly liked Bodie's realization, which offers a new spin on why he doesn't talk about his past:

It occurred to Bodie that he might be looking at this from the wrong angle. He was worried about becoming too fond of Doyle, but maybe it was the other way around. Maybe Doyle was becoming attached to him.

He liked that idea. A lot. And in the interests of encouraging Doyle’s continued fascination, Bodie decided he would dole out bits of his past very sparingly in the future. Drop a titbit now and again when he wanted Doyle’s full attention, but otherwise play it close to the chest.

Africa alone ought to be enough material for years to come.

Keeping secrets to keep Doyle close...I can definitely see this.

[myrebelcat]

I think it was when I noticed the good humor with which he keeps cutting Doyle off whenever he starts asking questions. The fact that it's obviously a long-running dynamic, and just as obviously Bodie doesn't mind at all.

I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

[asymphototropic]

You really got the constabulary philosophy of rolling the eyes, and "here we go again," just perfectly here. It made for a wonderfully light-touch in handling all those nasty problems of human interactions that can prove so sordid for the street cops. Family matters which turn into shotgun affairs. A very deft touch which made this story just the right balance of humor, affection for humanity, and rough reality.

Excellent fiction. I enjoyed it thoroughly.

[myrebelcat]

Thank you so much! I'm feeling highly complimented right now. :-)

And I had to laugh over "shotgun affairs". Good thing she *wasn't* a virgin, or got knocked up, or Bodie would have quite a different kind of shotgun problem on his hands.

[ancastar]

Absolutely delightful as always.

You know I love your Bodie. While he wasn't as Pooh-like here as he sometimes can be, I really liked how you had him extracting meaning from events, and working things out as the fic progressed.

One of the things I find particularly satisfying about your writing is how your characters' points of view are not absolute. Bodie and Doyle and the rest sometimes get things right and sometimes get them wrong. They grow and change as the story develops. Kudos for that. It's really, really hard to do. And you're a master. Can't wait to see what you write next. Thanks!

[myrebelcat]

Aw, thank you! *blushes* I really do enjoy the challenge of writing from a mistaken point of view, whenever I think I can pull it off.

I have no idea what I'll write next. I'll have to see what the challenge is!

[msmoat]

Ah, thank you! That was worth the anticipation and the wait. *g* I love a good mix of action, banter, and emotional undercurrents, so this suited me perfectly. Like callistosh65 I loved this line: Of all the impatient, bad-tempered sods in the word to find himself yoked to… Yeah. And poor Bodie doesn't know the half of it. (That is, just how long he's going to be yoked to Doyle. Most likely. *g*)

Very entertaining and enjoyable. Thanks!

[myrebelcat]

Or how, erm... literally. ;-)

I'm very glad you enjoyed my story! Thank you for the feedback. :-)