Discovered in the Bleak Midwinter - December 8 - Ficlet "Little Toy Trains"

[melanieathene]

Happy holidays, everyone! I hope you enjoy the story.

Comments

[macklingirl]

Oh, that's so sweet! I really could see Bodie at the window, all going soft. And I can see him at home, unwrapping his dolly. Thank you for this nice little story! :-)

[melanieathene]

Thank you for your kind words. :)

[loxleyprince]

Awww.... I can just imagine the expression on Bodie's face as he watched the train! Very nicely done! :-)

[melanieathene]

Thank you!

[shooting2kill]

I thought this was beautiful writing. full of Christmas atmosphere, especially lines like the following:

The smile that lit Bodie’s face at this unexpected offer triggered an answering warmth deep in Doyle’s breast. As they stood there, lost in each other’s eyes, a bubble of silence seemed to envelop them and a light dusting of snow began to fall. In that instant, Doyle felt he was encased within a snow globe; locked into one perfect moment when the rest of the world went away, and only he and Bodie remained. It should have felt suffocating, terrifying; instead, it felt so right that he found himself wishing the moment would never end.

I could just imagine them standing there, captivated by each other. And the last line was perfect.

Thanks a lot.

[melanieathene]

Thank you for the lovely comment. :)

[hagsrus]

Ah, very nice. I have a particular weakness for toy trains through I never had one. Thank you!

[melanieathene]

Thank you!

I've never had a toy train either, but I've seen some lovely displays (which obviously influenced my story!)

[msmoat]

That' a lovely little scene--I can just see it, and feel it. And then with a happy ending, perfect for Christmas. Thank you!

[melanieathene]

Thank you!

Gotta have a happy ending for a Christmas story -- which is why I hesitated to post my downer drabble.