Actually, this is a "good" depressing, so that's cool. :D
One thing I really like about the story is that you consistently imply much more than tell. It could be Bodie imagining everything in his grief. It could be Bodie actually being with Doyle. It even could be Doyle being a danger to Bodie (though *totally* unintentional). But they have their time together, though it can never be permanent.
Plus the underlying story comes out bit by bit - a really nice tease, and you don't even know you're being teased. All the clues are there, but you don't realize until you cross the finish line and go back to reread.
It shines different ways in different lights (hope that's not too corny).
Not too corny at all, thank you for your kind analysis - I did want the clues to be there on a re-read, so I'm very glad if you think I managed that :0)
I like the way you rose above the underlying sadness of the scenario to focus on their lingering bond. I also found comfort in the way Bodie worked through his 'encounters' with Doyle, as way of surviving his loss. ..That seems a very Bodie thing to do, in my mind. Nice work. :-)
RE: Very lyricalfiorenza_aOctober 4 2016, 13:12:01 UTC
Yes, as I see it, Bodie became increasingly delusional as time passed and simply folded the funeral, Cowley's orders to settle Doyle's affairs and receiving Doyle's personal effects into the fantasy - but some part of him always remained aware of the truth.
That part drove the fantasy rather than deal with the truth - I think it was only because, ultimately, Bodie trusts Cowley implicitly that the truth got a voice. I'm not sure anyone else could have got through to Bodie.
But that's only my take - others may see things differently :0)
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...but if it had to happen, this is a very well done way for it to happen.
I *do* like this, and thank you for sharing; but I'm off to be depressed now, LOL.
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My gift - spreading the misery!
Still, I expect the BB will be full of happier things :0)
Note to self - stop depressing people...
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One thing I really like about the story is that you consistently imply much more than tell. It could be Bodie imagining everything in his grief. It could be Bodie actually being with Doyle. It even could be Doyle being a danger to Bodie (though *totally* unintentional). But they have their time together, though it can never be permanent.
Plus the underlying story comes out bit by bit - a really nice tease, and you don't even know you're being teased. All the clues are there, but you don't realize until you cross the finish line and go back to reread.
It shines different ways in different lights (hope that's not too corny).
Thank you for that.
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Not too corny at all, thank you for your kind analysis - I did want the clues to be there on a re-read, so I'm very glad if you think I managed that :0)
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I've always thought Bodie is a survivor.
I'm glad you liked the read, thank you :0)
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Now I'm going to join golden_bastet and have a good cry :-)
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I really must pick up some of my more cheerful projects...but I'm glad you liked it :0)
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Yes, as I see it, Bodie became increasingly delusional as time passed and simply folded the funeral, Cowley's orders to settle Doyle's affairs and receiving Doyle's personal effects into the fantasy - but some part of him always remained aware of the truth.
That part drove the fantasy rather than deal with the truth - I think it was only because, ultimately, Bodie trusts Cowley implicitly that the truth got a voice. I'm not sure anyone else could have got through to Bodie.
But that's only my take - others may see things differently :0)
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