Discovered in the Christmas Tree, January 6

[loyseofverlaine]

My prompt was "a blue bauble". I have no idea how I got from that to this.

Comments

[etain_antrim]

Bodie is so right about them making Avril part of their family in no time. Nice job showing how both men have aged and also giving a few more details of Bodie's very sketchy background. I like their mix of caution and openness when they confront the situation.

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you. I'm pleased you enjoyed. I can see them both being eager to establish some kind of a family connection, but wary at the same time.

[callistosh65]

Oh dear lord, this was perfect! You hit every kink I have with these two - and all done with such a deft touch. Doyle was sitting opposite, looking much like an aging terrier on guard. So many gorgeous lines - your dialogue is pitch-perfect, as ever - but this had me grinning from ear to ear.

Wonderful older lads - and you know this cries sequel, right?

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you! I'm so pleased this worked, because the dread words "Mary Sue" were lingering at my shoulder the whole time. *G*

I don't usually do sequels - my idea well seems to dry up at the end of a story - but for this one, I actually can envisage a continuation. Maybe even two.

[byslantedlight]

Oh wow, Bodie and Doyle have a baby! Hmmmn! *g* I much prefer Avril's independence though, and the way she told them very firmly that she was already organised, thank you very much - I hope she keeps it up! I love Doyle the older bookworm too, and Bodie the sensible adviser! Yeay for finishing our challenge with Prosfic, and thank you! *g*

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you! Doyle is seen reading heavy stuff several times in the series, so I can easily picture him as an avid reader as he gets older and has a bit more time. And poor Avril went through a first draft of being a stereotypical swooning female, until I thought, "Hey, she's a Bodie. Those genes have to be good for something,"

[gilda_elise]

I really did enjoy this. I love how the situation isn't what you think it might be, and a peek into Bodie's background is always a treat. But best I really liked that Avril had more backbone to her than first met the eye. And, of course, older lads! A really lovely story.

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you. I'm pleased you enjoyed. Avril did go through a first draft of being a stereotypical swooning female, but then I figured as a Bodie, she'd have some built-in toughness to her.

[moonlightmead]

Read this last night and came straight back this morning to re-read. Really enjoyed it, from "Still got your way with the birds, I see" - such a secure-sounding teasing - to "You sounded like you might be decent" - sums up the whole of the rest of that family there..

[loyseofverlaine]

Thank you! I'm very pleased you found it worth a second reading. ationship