What a recursive coincidence. Right after I saw your post on simstorytellers (before you left this comment) I began stalking your story as well. I'm only now caught up.
If this had been the first chapter, the pictures probably would have made me pass over it, but since I can count on you to write well anyway, it's fine :) I did the same thing once, but I'm thinking it wasn't as well received as this is.
Oh, Ajay and Tank. Both pretty clueless, but in such different ways that have very different consequences.
Yeah, I was actually thinking maybe I shouldn't have advertised this chapter, because as I'm getting back from a hiatus, this is probably being seen for the first time by a lot of people, and well, it's not the picture size that's a problem, it's the quality.
PT's a homebody, I've decided, because of his lazy/active points and his film and literature hobby. I must admit though, my perfect day is also similar.
Poor Tank is really having a hard time. It's a difficult age, even if you are kind of a bully. Kendall and he would be really great together if he were as much like his father as he tries to pretend.
I'm really glad people are liking the last scene. I have next to no experience with the US military, so I was afraid it would sound very ignorant.
After the first three pics, I forgot about their size (and I'm reading this on my "bad" computer lol), and was only reminded by the note at the end. Glad you didn't waste your time re-shooting, it would have been totally superfluous. The pictures are quite good, the simmies even got fingers =p
Another perfect chapter, without a word out of place. The finale unsurprisingly shows all of your storytelling mastery, as befits this strangetownian(?) sonata. I loved how the camera held us captive in that last scene, in a corner of the desk at the beginning, before widening to a scarier horizon. The reader knows it's going to happen, but I still went "Crap.. :s" when Crystal got caught :p
I still ♥ your Tank, following Buck's advice was so cute! Kendal, you idiot...!
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Oh, Ajay and Tank. Both pretty clueless, but in such different ways that have very different consequences.
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Poor Tank. Kendall should be more sensitive - it IS the thought that counts.
The best part of this update was the last. I loved the General's sarcastic comments. I guess this means trouble for the Curiouses.......
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PT's a homebody, I've decided, because of his lazy/active points and his film and literature hobby. I must admit though, my perfect day is also similar.
Poor Tank is really having a hard time. It's a difficult age, even if you are kind of a bully. Kendall and he would be really great together if he were as much like his father as he tries to pretend.
I'm really glad people are liking the last scene. I have next to no experience with the US military, so I was afraid it would sound very ignorant.
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Another perfect chapter, without a word out of place. The finale unsurprisingly shows all of your storytelling mastery, as befits this strangetownian(?) sonata. I loved how the camera held us captive in that last scene, in a corner of the desk at the beginning, before widening to a scarier horizon. The reader knows it's going to happen, but I still went "Crap.. :s" when Crystal got caught :p
I still ♥ your Tank, following Buck's advice was so cute! Kendal, you idiot...!
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