"Meeting"

[diet_otaku]

Title: Meeting
Author: hola_meg_a_cola
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: House, M.D.
Pairing: House/Cuddy undertones
Summary: Greg House was certainly a man that no one could forget, to say the least. Even after twenty years, Lisa Cuddy still remembers her first encounter with the man, not that it was very hard to forget…
Disclaimer: I own nothing. If I did, then life

Comments

[sisterelwood]

Very nice. I like how you described House's appearance. Seems very him and Cuddy was very nicely written, too. Just a little thing to consider- in large universities they dont give out letter grades. A 'B-' would translate to about a 3.0 on a university scale.

[hola_meg_a_cola]

Fixed that. And thanks~

[lea724]

I actually happen to disagree with the above commenter about how grades are presented. At the large university I went to, grades on individual assignments (like what Cuddy had) were usually given out as part of the grading scale. That is:

100-90 = A
89-80 = B
79-70 = C

Etc. Then, all of the number grades would be averaged, and the student would be given a letter grade of A, B, C, etc. for the course which, when computing grade point average, would then be converted to 4.0 (A), 3.0 (B), 2.0 (C), etc.

And for what it's worth, a 3.0 would be equal to a B, and a 2.75 would be a B-. At least in my school, that's how it is.

Since your profile says that you're in high school in the U.S., I'm sure this is all familiar to you, but I wanted to write it out anyway.

:)

I enjoyed the fic! I always love reading the different variations about how House and Cuddy first met.

[hola_meg_a_cola]

I'll change that back then to what I had originally in a moment..

Yesh, unfortunately I'm still in high school and what's more unfortunate is that my school goes by the 7 point grading system:

100-93 = A
92-85 = B
And so on..

And thanks for liking~ The college years are such an unexplored area that it gives you a lot to work with :3

[anakisa]

This story is amazing!

You kept both characters completely IC and their banter was very realistic.
Of course, any reference to House admiring Cuddy's girls is always welcome, especially if it makes said admiration span for several years.

I absolutely loved it!

[hola_meg_a_cola]

Mm, thanks~ I find the thought of House admiring Cuddy's breasts highly amusing- so much so, that I'm laughing about it now XD

[dedletrbox]

Liked this a lot--descriptions were good, dialogue was great and, although it was short, things happened! Everything very in character. There are a very few word-level things I might change ("I’m sure you won’t hear the last of me, Cuddy." = "I'm sure you haven't heard/seen the last of me..."), but I think that other fandom's loss is definitely House's gain.

[hola_meg_a_cola]

Hmm, I'll fix that in a moment once I log into my writing journal. And thanks for critiquing~

[anonymous]

Interesting story; kept my attention. Both characters felt real.

Concrit: 'Pasture' should be 'Pasteur' (I think your spellchecker nabbed it!). The only problem I have with your writing is an occasional tell instead of showing: "She was a perfectionist" for example. It's more involving if you show that through her actions (which you did, in fact), rather than telling the reader. Also, start a new paragraph every time somebody new speaks.

And keep writing in this fandom, please!

[hola_meg_a_cola]

Thanks~ Also, I describe a lot of things that had happened past tense and I used that to keep the story flowing along. But I'll definately keep that in mind.

Ah, the new paragraph thingy. My friend, my foe. *shakes fist in air* I'm working on that bad boy.

[cincoflex]

I'm with the reviewer above--lot of telling, not much showing. I also noticed a tendency for the sentences to fall into a bit of a singsong pattern--you may want to vary them with shorter and longer ones to break that up.

Your characterization is fairly sweet, and I do like that they're establishing the groundwork for the people we know they're going to be come. Clearly you have their personas down very well, so that part really shines through.

(It's all right, not alright, and she would be swollen with pride, not swelled. I wouldn't have said anything but you asked for concrit so I'm including them.I'd advise a Beta. I use one, and several of the writers here do too--they are worth their weight in gold for stuff like this!)

[hola_meg_a_cola]

Thanks~ Sorry if I fall into a pattern; I attribute that to writing so late. I'll fix those errors once I log in, and I'll keep Betas in mind. In previous fandoms, I've had friends who've beta-ed for me, so I'll have to find one for here.

Your comments about my characterization made me feel better. I avoided writing "House" fiction because I was afraid of screwing up the characters we know and love with the exception of Cameron.

Thanks again~