I re-wrote it in place since I first posted it, I'm not sure why, but I made it longer and messed up the tenses and agreements in someplaces.
This is like the 4th minor revision.
I was actually going to revise it more, maybe break it into 2 or 3 sections, but then I was like "um, you can do this later" and went to take a nap or study or something....
but thanks, that is a typo, it should read more like:
Not even worthy of the name "whore".
...although in the origional edition, I did call her a whore, I changed my mind and added more insult, but it's more suggesting that the cost that she causes isn't compensated for by others (financially) so that's partly why she collapses into herself and self-destructs (emotionally, physically).
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I'm not sure why, but I made it longer and messed up the tenses and agreements in someplaces.
This is like the 4th minor revision.
I was actually going to revise it more, maybe break it into 2 or 3 sections, but then I was like "um, you can do this later" and went to take a nap or study or something....
but thanks, that is a typo, it should read more like:
Not even worthy
of the name "whore".
...although in the origional edition, I did call her a whore, I changed my mind and added more insult, but it's more suggesting that the cost that she causes isn't compensated for by others (financially) so that's partly why she collapses into herself and self-destructs (emotionally, physically).
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