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[pabzi]

 
Untitled (Unless someone will give it one :p)
David/Nick
Rating: Uhh, I think its NC-17...but theres a thin line between that and R... whatever it is, its rated that way for sex and angst.
I DONT OWN THEM!

A/N: This idea will not let me sleep, eat or do anything really, so I MUST write it. Thank god that at work my job doesnt involve being focused.

Comments

[anonymous]

WOW! Wow... just WOW Mic. Im speechless. THIS was what's been occupying your mind? A dark story that would not go away? Thats dark. Ive never seen David like that. More importantly Ive never read stuff like that from you. David was scary, wanting Nick to prove to him that he's not like the rest by raping him? RAPING him? Like what Nick said: "Did I mention that I love everything about you? Including the fact that I dont always understand you." - I dont always understand David either. I got scared seeing him like that. Its so different from the snarky/adorable David I know and love. And Nicky, poor Nicky. He didnt want to hurt David. Im really, extremely relieved that both of them cried at the end. If they didnt Id think something's wrong with them. Both demented, not just David. Im so happy they cried! And thanks for the snarkism at the ending. I needed that. The story's dark, and David scared me. You wrote this in 2 hours? Youre fab Mic! Is this the darkest fic youve ever written? I enjoyed it, scary to see David like that, but its

[pabzi]

it was realy that scary????????
i didnt know it was so dark. im sorry. i guess i just had to get my dark side out.
david needed it though. he is still sweet cute snarky david.. everyonr has hard things. thanks for reading. even though im sure its OOC and totally awful

[anonymous]

It reminded me of that very dark fic you read before, another pairing, not Nick/David. That character was dark, abusive, and David reminded me of him when he forced Nick to rape him. Ive never seen him like this before. I was so happy that things end snarkily and that they both cried. David is back to normal again. =) Poor Nicky, it must be so hard for him to do that. Its not awful AT ALL. You wrote this under 2 hours, and you wrote it so well. The story just flew out of your fingers didnt it? Its great. : ) And David was only OOC because he was possesed by his demons. But then he turned snarky and we all know its the same David. ^_^

So happy to see you writing more.
Sab. :)

[pabzi]

nononono its not like that other story!!! he didnt hurt nick! he forced nick to hurt him. i still think its bad, but its not AU, right? if it is, i trust you to tell me so i delete it before making a fool out of myself cause i dont do AU and you know it.
as for them, yeah, happy ending is very important. i would never kill someone off, or leave them angry at eachother or missunderstanding.

[csi_niteowl]

Don't delete it! It's great. I felt so bad for Nick and David. Is there going to be more explaining what happened to David? You wrote it in two hours? Wow. It would have taken me days.

Two stories from you in two days. *doing a happy dance*

Niteowl

[pabzi]

thanks :) well, it wasnt exactly 2 stories in 2 days, cause the other one i just had to decide that im making it 3 chapters and not 2, add a paragraph, and put it up :)
as for this one...god. im freaked out by what i wrote. it was so fucking hard, but i had to get it out, cause it wouldnt leave me alone. work went so fast today because it was playing over and over in my head while i worked, but last night i couldnt sleep, and i forgot to eat at some point...had to do it :)
im so happy that you guys like it. thank you. after i reread it, i was like WHAT THE FUCK DID I WRITE??? but thanks :)

[korbjaeger]

Hot damn, you weren't kidding about this being dark! But it's definitely powerful!! Two hours? I'm humbled. (Damn this writer's block I have right now!) Bravissima!!

[pabzi]

thanks :) told ya it was dark :)
your writers block will go away. with me it comes and goes. im witing for yours to go away :D

[mia_charlize]

Damn, that's good. I could really feel for Nicky, wanting to help David but so very scared of hurting him. I'm glad I came by to read it.
Love the darkness. It gives a very good insight into who David is inside.

[pabzi]

THANKS!!! im happy that you read it too :)

[miarr]

I don't know the fandom, or the characters, so I won't be able to say if it's out-of-character/in-character, but your general writing style? Is great. I loved that you made me go along with characters I've never met before; get lost in the tension and the pain, then sigh in audible relief when the conflict was resolved. You have a few spelling/grammar mistakes, but those happen to the best of us, and are easily fixed.

On that same note, actually, I'd like to offer my services as a beta reader, if you need or want one--if you'd care for someone to go over your spelling, perhaps discuss certain wording or phrasing in sentences, then I'm your gal. It's not that you need such a proofreader, really, but rather that I really love the job, and make a point of offering my services to the most promising young writers I meet. (Plus, you're Israeli, so it'll be a double pleasure! ;P)
It's perfectly fine if you don't want a beta, of course, but I'd just thought I'd check. Keep writing, you're a joy to read. ♥

[pabzi]

wow, thank you so much. it is amazing that someone reading the style, who doesnt know the character, thins that my writing is good :D im impressed that you are impressed :p and promissing? me? wow. thanks :D
as for betas...thanks. i havent used them till now. i usually dont have patience cause i just want to get the story up, and usually all that matters to me is that the plot makes sense, BUT i do need to start improving my spelling and grammar...i kept saying- im israeli so its excusable- but im moving to the states in a few months...eventually i will be going to community college (job and appartment first, then ill figure that out) so yeah. thanks a ton!!!

[miarr]

If you want to start sending me future stories, or want me to start now, I'd be honored. ;D My e-mail is sineomuse@yahoo.com and you can contact me there, if you want to work out further transcation details.

I must say I'm looking forward to working with you. Thank you for this opportunity!

[pabzi]

thanks!
im pabzicsw@yahoo.com