Fic: Primal Instinct

[dexstarr]

Title: Primal Instinct
Author: dexstarr
Word Count: 2000
Rating: NC-17
Challenge: Dark Fic Table #4: Blood
Characters: Bellatrix Lestrange, Lucius Malfoy, Rodolphus Lestrange
Pairing: Bellatrix/Lucius
Warnings: Death Eaters torturing people, lots of blood, sex
Author's Note: I wrote this for scortum-lupa, as a cheer-up gift. She requested Bella, Lucius, and blood...

Comments

[reg_flint]

Great torture. It was very well described. Bloodplay was fabulous. "Fucking intense" and I adore the hint of femmeslash at the end. Descriptive but not to the point of just details, it all meshed together nicely.

[dexstarr]

For the longest time I couldn't think of an ending, then that line just came to me, and I really like it. I had in my notes that I wanted Lucius to remember that Bellatrix is a Legilimens, but then I didn't want to explicitly state it.

Thanks! Yet again trying to describe stuff I haven't done, glad it worked.

[dexstarr]

I'm quite happy you like. Tickled red maybe? LOL

Glad it was worth the wait and that you enjoyed it so much babe <3.

And yes, I hoped you'd like that line :D

[dexstarr]

Glad you liked as well!

And hell yeah Bella's bad, that's why I love her so much, and like writing her so much. I get to be a mean nasty evil bitch without feeling bad!

[dexstarr]

Yes, I agree fully. It's why when I read I tend to look for the grey characters, rather than fully black or white. There's nothing interest-catching about the stereotypical fully bad or good guy, but show me a character who has layers of personality and is mostly evil? Mmm.

I think it's much harder to be evil than it is to be good. And you know, I think I would like to BE evil :D

[deirdre_aithne]

*fawns* Oh, that was deliciously dark and sexy!

[dexstarr]

Why thank you!

[thaneofcawdor]

Well... that was one of the most seductive things I could wake up to.

Lucius was determined to wrangle the best noises he could from their Muggle, with the aim of encouraging his sister-in-law to lavish attention on his throbbing member.
This whole portrayal of their activity as a pleasurable sport is so wonderfully depraved. Many darkfics (as expected) bring up the subject of torture-for-fun, but you make it even sicker. Their exploitation of "their" Muggle and each other make it twisted on two separate levels. It's an intriguing dynamic.

Lucius tilted his hips back slightly, and then thrust forward savagely, grunting.
I love this unbound Lucius - it's a sexual shock, like when you see someone you're in a romantic relationship with come for the first time and get that animalisitic expression.

Overall, this is well-written and I love the fierce relationship between Rodolphus and Bellatrix.

[dexstarr]

Oooh! Thank you muchly for the detailed feedback. And I'm quite happy you woke up to something good :D

I'm quite pleased you enjoyed how I described the torture - I kept it as a sort of background to the main activity of Bella and Lucius, but it was what brought them together and pushed them to be so primal. Maybe I should've picked something like this for my darkfestfic! Heh.

The second sentence you highlighted:
Lucius tilted his hips back slightly, and then thrust forward savagely, grunting. I admit, I had a really hard time writing the sex and especially the climax, so I'm glad it worked so well

[thaneofcawdor]

It's my pleasure :) I love giving feedback.

You went further as well, because I don't really enjoy bloodplay as a rule: I don't dislike or become disgusted by it, but it doesn't usually do anything for me. If I write it, it's only lip- or neck-bites. But you made it hot. So, awesome.

I admit I always tend to push Roddy to the back - I know it's hardly fair because Rowling didn't give him much of a chance by not even honouring him with a detailed physical description or, indeed, anything more than a name. Your idea of Bella demanding satisfaction from him fits her character well and you write them as a convincing pair.

[dexstarr]

I'm happy you found the bloodplay hot - I was nervous about writing it, but I'm glad it seems to be going over well.

As for Rodolphus...yeah, I tend to do the same thing really. I wish there was more information about the Death Eaters, particularly Roddy and Rabastan. But it's kind of fun to piece little bits of information together and try to infer my own view of him, and his relationship with Bella. Then yesterday I read an excellent fic from his POV, and now I'm itching to try to give him a bit more screentime in my own fics.

Plus evil is just sexy? heh heh