I completely fell in love with the first 4 sentences. I don't know what half of it means but it just... Sounds so good and right for some reason... They just sound, read and speak so trong, and yet... Tender, is the closest I can come to it.
I think one needs to hear this as a song to see thefull potential, but even so it's awesome... I love the subject, and how you've put it down. This is one of these poems you can read several times and keep discovering new things ad layers. I liked the way the two phrases came back every time to be edittet at the last one. You did that really well. I also liked the way you played with words, Starstruck honey and things like that. they kind of set the tone your poem is in. Awesome poem sweety, really.
Well, 'joie de vivre' is an expression pretty much meaning 'carefree', and 'Demain il fera jour' is a French proverb that idiomatically translates as "tomorrow is another day". And thanks for the rave review! Always good to know when somebody likes something I've done.
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I think one needs to hear this as a song to see thefull potential, but even so it's awesome... I love the subject, and how you've put it down. This is one of these poems you can read several times and keep discovering new things ad layers. I liked the way the two phrases came back every time to be edittet at the last one. You did that really well.
I also liked the way you played with words, Starstruck honey and things like that. they kind of set the tone your poem is in. Awesome poem sweety, really.
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