Comments | derevko_child: Dollhouse fic(s): 4 Drabbles; PG-13

derevko_child

Dollhouse fic(s): 4 Drabbles; PG-13

Mar 24, 2010 22:25

Title: 4 drabbles
Rating: PG-13
Disclaimer: Not mine.
Characters: Adelle, Whiskey/Claire, Topher, Dominic
Words: 600 (100/200/200/100)
Spoilers: None
Notes: Written for whedonland's My Favourite Things (and yes, I did this while at work). Apparently, I'm more productive with fic writing when I'm in the office. Also, I realized I can send things to myself ( Read more... )

laurence dominic, topher brink, fic: dollhouse, whiskey, otp: dewitt/dominic, adelle dewitt

Comments 8

bossladydewitt March 24 2010, 15:38:31 UTC

Awww I love the Adelle/Topher. They are so cute. I wish we saw more of her as he caregiver. I am sure we would get those cute moments here and there. :)

I also love your DeWitt/Dominic fic. I often wonder what happened to him. :(

derevko_child March 25 2010, 02:27:54 UTC

Thank you :) I always thought that writing Adelle/Topher after the thought-pocalypse would be difficult because there's always the danger of bordering into saccharine (or something akin to saccharine in their messed up world). My first try wasn't so bad. :P

D/D post-E2 basically writes itself. We all know Dominic came roaring back in the city to help the newly-crowned Queen of the World in restoring order.

bossladydewitt March 25 2010, 02:36:02 UTC

It wasn't too sweet at all. I think that there had to have been time where Topher was a bit calmer so I think you captured it well.

Yes he is totally her slave! :-P

cassi0pei4 March 24 2010, 23:26:08 UTC

Oh, your caregiving-Adelle is so spot on! And I loved that Dominic called her ma'am when he sees her after the apocalypse ends. It is so something he would do once they stopped hating each other so much.

Also, in your Topher&Adelle fic you wrote "Topher always have bad dreams," but I think you either meant "Topher *will* always have bad dreams" or "Topher always *has* bad dreams."

derevko_child March 25 2010, 02:32:09 UTC

Thanks :D

And I loved that Dominic called her ma'am when he sees her after the apocalypse ends.

Of course, because Dominic ain't dead. Also, I believe that him calling her 'ma'am' after all these years would be some sort of term of endearment for both of them. lol.

And thank you for catching that. I cheated a little (I don't even know if my edit is even grammatically correct) because I'm trying to stick to the 200-word structure. Hee. Thanks again!

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derevko_child March 25 2010, 13:29:31 UTC

Thank you :D

just_drifting_6 March 25 2010, 10:12:53 UTC

These are amazing! Seriously. The power so little words have... man.

I can't even decide which is my favourite! I think possibly the Whiskey one. Mostly because of the last line (or lines).
“Maybe I lied.” He answers.
She believes him.

Such brilliant contrast between the previous line Despite what she tells herself, she doesn’t believe he’s going to come back for her.

And the Adelle/Dom ones, of course.

He won’t be there tomorrow. She needs to get used to it. I am envious of your brilliant last line skills!

And also “I’m sorry to be late, ma’am.” Because of course they have gotten over their problems and are totally comfortable with each other now! I loved the simplicity, and how there was no explanation needed, they just fit together. And that Adelle was ruling the world. Oh yeah.

derevko_child March 25 2010, 13:38:58 UTC

Thank you :D

The power so little words have...

That's the fun with challenges like this. You have to make sure you get the right words to convey what you want your readers to feel all in those word limit. <3 Writing drabbles are difficult, lol.

I found the Whiskey drabble and the post E2 drabble the easiest to write. The words were easy to pick from my head (plus, D/D, post E2 = writes itself)

Thanks again for commenting!