Comments | deraliaearth: Bromance

hanuueshe in deraliaearth

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blue_fjords August 29 2009, 04:47:53 UTC

Yay, it's up! And I love that last change!

I think you do a really good job of bringing in several different tones; it's at once funny, bittersweet and very Gwen & Ianto. B/c that's a tone, too!

Awesome job!

hanuueshe September 19 2009, 03:05:32 UTC

Thanks- for both the beta and the comment.

Yeah, I felt like I needed to leave the ending open for further lulzy adventures, and if nothing else, retcon has that potential. ;)

candi_apple_red August 29 2009, 05:48:36 UTC

Lovely. Funny and in character, and the last little vignette was hysterical!

hanuueshe September 19 2009, 03:05:53 UTC

Thank you!

lefaym August 29 2009, 06:44:51 UTC

I really like this -- especially that the after-effects of the sex are awkward and messy and there's no really good way of dealing with it. But at the same time, it's not the world's biggest disaster either.

hanuueshe September 19 2009, 03:07:11 UTC

I think a lot of under-the-influence sex is like that. Thanks for reading!

hab318princess August 29 2009, 12:56:46 UTC

lovely progression of their relationship... enjoyed that a lot

hanuueshe September 19 2009, 03:07:37 UTC

Thank you!

curriejean August 29 2009, 15:48:53 UTC

THIS IS GREAT.

The humor underlying the awkwardness with the soup. The specifics of knowing how to use a gun that I didn't know and are so fracking sexy and convincing.

"He makes a nice lasagna," he replied neutrally.

I lol'd at this specifically, and generally at how they couldn't handle dinner.

Somehow, she couldn’t shake the feeling that what he really meant was, No one but me saw.

YEP. It was in the grin. Almost didn't even need to say that part.

Oh man, and that you're telling this part of the story AFTER the fact, where there's a mountain more humour, because the reader's discovering this WITH them entirely (hahaha the clothes), it so original and fun. And more engrossing, really, because if we'd been there to see the thing take place, we'd have seen them being all OOC and it wouldn't have been nearly as interesting.

Found a typo:
placed her hand on is thigh

So. Loved your fic. As requested.

hanuueshe September 19 2009, 03:10:30 UTC

I'm glad the specifics came across as realistic, because that scene was totally half-assed from internet research.

It's Torchwood; cooking doesn't fall under their jurisdiction. Also, dinner!fail is something of a running gag with me.

Grr... *fixes typo*

Thank you!