Comments | denorios: Fic: Action Speak Louder Than Words | Pike/Kirk | Star Trek XI

denorios

Fic: Action Speak Louder Than Words | Pike/Kirk | Star Trek XI | PG-13

May 27, 2009 23:48

Title: Actions Speak Louder Than Words
Author: denorios
Pairing: Pike/Kirk
Rating: PG-13
Summary: The Romulan slug is having unforeseen complications for Pike.
Author's Notes: Thanks to rachel2205 for looking over this for me. I haven't written anything in years, and I'm so damn rusty!

( In which Pike says more than he intends, and Kirk is amused... )

ships: kirk/pike, writing, movies: star trek, fanfic: star trek

Comments 24

rachel2205 May 27 2009, 22:54:58 UTC

No problem dear! Like I said in my comments, I think it works well and I love Bones! Ah, doctor humour. Poor Pike! I cringe at the idea of speaking my mind like that, haha. But I think Kirk secretly likes a bit of straighttalking...

confusedkayt July 4 2009, 06:19:00 UTC

:D Imagine my delight when I saw your name as a beta! ANd such a good story, too...

possibly_thrice May 27 2009, 23:10:21 UTC

:DDDDDDDDD

THIS. IS HOTLY RIDICULOUS AND RIDICULOUSLY HOT. om nom nom the kissy kissy descriptions, Pike being a failure about resisting temptation etc., McCoy, and, uh, yeah, McCoy, basically, and Kirk being a sweetums, and why are you not pimping it out for all the other poor bereft Pikelovers to read?

possibly_thrice May 30 2009, 06:53:41 UTC

ALSO.

Inquiring minds want to know: exactly which parts is Pike saying aloud? How much of the (pretty, pretty) physical description is going into it? And what person is it in? Is it like, mental speculation normal or more like actual talking to someone? As in: "Neither am I, but if you stay long enough I’m sure you’ll find out. You look tired, your shoulders rounded and heavy" or "Neither am I, but if you stay long enough I’m sure you’ll find out. Kirk looks tired, his shoulders rounded and heavy" for greater lulz, etc. SO MANY POSSIBLE INTERPRETATIONS. It is tormenting me.

monkeyscorpion May 27 2009, 23:10:53 UTC

Ooh! Yum! I'm so glad you decided to finish it.

wickedground May 27 2009, 23:20:20 UTC

omg that was hilarious (McCoy smelling like a Klingon brothel, really? LMAO) and hot. Enjoyed it very very much (and that is coming from someone who usually only reads Kirk/McCoy) :D ♥ I really like your writing style.

exuberantself May 28 2009, 01:23:57 UTC

Kirk has a point, even though technically he is holding Pike‘s hand, but since Pike has made no move to free himself, so he supposes the point still appli- Pike is cut off mid-thought, or perhaps mid-sentence since the two are more or less the same at this juncture, by Kirk’s mouth on his...

I thought for certain that this would be my favorite part, but then McCoy walked in. I love that he's completely unphased by the mutual molestation of the two highest ranking men on the ship...I imagine it's not the first time he's walked in on Kirk. But the last two lines? Win.

Really great job overall, btw. If this is you rusty, I can't wait if you decide to get some practice in.