Fic: A Perfect Mistake

[demi_rabbit]

Wrote this little ditty a while back...<3 It's angsty, which is unusual for me, but I still like it...

Title: A Perfect Mistake
Fandom: Ouran High School Host Club
Character(s)/Pairing: Implied KyouKao, TamaHaru, HikaRen
Summary: It was the last thing they expected to see--the last person they expected to meet--but, somehow, it all worked out in the

Comments

I just had a "so kawaii" moment....*commence puddle of AWWWW*

[ceile_chan]

Ah, nee-chan, what an adorably angsty one-shot you've allowed me to consume. I think that you captured a very creative and believable dynamic between Kyouya and Kaoru, and it's alternately funny, emotional, and serious all nicely rolled up into this lovely one-shot.

I think you have a good handle on perspective, and the piece flows quite nicely from one character to the other, and I had the sense that it *was* Kaoru, and that it *was* Kyouya, so wonderful work there.

A few teeny word usage errors, but, that's just your nee-san being in "editor" mode. Honestly, the maturity in your writing makes it easy to gloss over such things, especially when, yeah, I know what you meant. I have worked with writers who have studied writing in college who would have had a lot to learn from you. I think that you have a lot of complex ideas, and they are very well expressed overall, especially for a younger writer such as yourself. I really enjoyed this story, so thanks for sharing it!

~Nee-san

Re: I just had a "so kawaii" moment....*commence puddle of AWWWW*

[demi_rabbit]

Awwww, nee-san! Gawd, your reviews make me so bashful (but most do)! I'm glad the characters were recognizable and that the previous relationship dynamic wasn't too hard for you to grasp! Perspective has always been the fun side of writing, I think - especially when it comes to such wonderful pairings as KyouKao in such wonderfully thought-out situations as a Queer As Folk slight-spin-off.

My editorial mistakes are many and far too often, but in all honesty, I am a lazy editor and an even lazier harper on mah darlin' beta. XD Your "editor" mode opinion is always welcome, though! And....-awwwww! You really think college peeps could learn from me! *prideful!* That makes me so...so happy!!

Anyway, I'm glad you liked this - it twas' a festering idea in my notebooks of pre-writes and discards! <3

~Nee-chan

so ceile_chan recomended this to me

[sleigh_belle]

I have to say I really enjoyed this. I am a big fan of angsty works and you have managed to provide a nice combination of angst and sweet. You have kept both characters well within their respective personalities and managed to create a believable relationship between them. I like when things come from a different perspective than one would commonly imagine and I think that you have managed to come up with a unique scenario. Keep up the good work, and if you don't mind I may check out some of your other works.

Re: so ceile_chan recomended this to me

[demi_rabbit]

I'm glad you liked this - I've always aimed to please.

I, myself, never really liked writing angst (oh, reading it was always fun) but it just felt write, and I'm happy that you feel it was balanced nicely with some fluff-ish quality.

8D I wouldn't mind at all if you continued to read my fictions - in face, I'd adore it if you did! Happy readings, I wish you~!