Fic: Moonlight, Aiming for the Heart, Mick/Josef, PG

[del_writes]

This is one of the things I did yesterday instead of working on the NaNovel. It's my first attempt at anything in the fandom and I'm not entirely pleased with how it turned out. I feel like I'm missing one part from the structure. I had originally made it five parts, but one of them didn't fit stylistically at all, so I cut it. Also, I don't like

Comments

[hidari_blue]

This is beautifully written, and very believable for the characters. I can't wait for the next part. :D

[del_writes]

Thank you so much. I was incredibly unsure about it. I'm really really trying to work on my NaNoWriMo novel for the rest of the month, so it will probably be awhile before I can have the next story written and posted.

[havemy_heart]

This is gorgeous! You used the recurring theme to great effect and I love the last section more than I can say :)

I'm adding this to my memories, and if you're writing more, I'll read it!

[del_writes]

Thank you, thank you. I was very very nervous about this piece. I'm glad it worked.

[_profiterole_]

Very interesting way to deal with the topic. ^__^ Great job!

[del_writes]

Sorry it took so long for me to get back to you (2 weeks, yikes). Things have been a little hectic and I wasn't getting notifications.

Thank's so much for reading.

[garrideb]

This is a very neat story. The recurring line worked perfectly, in my opinion, and I loved bit where, when Mick claims he was aiming for the heart, Josef says "you found one."

My only critique (and it's a small one) is that in Moonlight, vampires don't die from a stake to the heart.

[del_writes]

Thanks for reading. I was a little nervous about the structure, and Josef's voice. I'm glad it worked.

I realized about halfway through I was not quite following the rules of that universe. I've thought about trying to edit around it, and I may still do it.

It seems a logical first step in killing a vampire, to immobilize them, so it only really doesn't work for the third part, but it doesn't there, so I should fix it somehow.

[mad_cat_grin]

oooh love your story! can't wait for more ^^

[del_writes]

Yikes, 10 days to reply. I don't think I'm getting my notifications.

Thanks so much for reading and your too kind words. I'm really hopeful that I'll get more finished in this fandom.