Fifteen Minute Fic Challenge #78

[deannawol]

Name: Dark Alleys
World: Original Fiction
Words: 285

Rating: R

Warnings: You read the rating. This is not a piece for the kiddies. It's dark. It's gritty. It's not happy.

Comments

[dar_nykalar]

...wow.

There are not words. Very, very, very freakish and unnerving.

[deannawol]

Thanks. Little freaked out by it myself actually.

[littlecj]

Stumbled onto your piece and my god its amazing

i love the style and the soul of it is well directed to the reader i really really like it

(soz for the barging in just had to post something)

[deannawol]

Barging in is perfectly acceptable :) Like most writing enthusiast, I am a feedback whore ;)

Thanks for the comments *blush*

Have to say that it freaked me out a little to write it, but it came out very sticcatto and very dark. Was trying not to be explicit, trying to hide the meaning behind single words.

Glad you liked it and thanks for commenting :)

[cygny]

Oh! This is dark and depressing indeed.

Head lights lit her briefly but died again, joining her lost dreams.

Definitely my favourite sentence, since it sort of describes her situation in just a few words. Poor girl.

[deannawol]

Well, I did warn you :)

It rather shocked me when I read it after I wrote it. Kinda wonder what my psyche is trying to tell me :/

Although I dunno, to me the last sentence is the most horrifying.

[redwolf]

There's a weird structure to this, but it suits the tone of the story beautifully. Well done.

[deannawol]

Thank you *blush*

Was going for a very sticcatto flow, stark, with the meaning obvious but not always explicitly stated.

Thanks for reading/commenting :)