Comments | dbsk_flashfic: put a little love away (response to flashfic challenge 11: let dai)

onew in dbsk_flashfic

put a little love away (response to flashfic challenge 11: let dai)

Jul 22, 2008 23:20

Title: put a little love away
Author: Reeza (aoireeza)
Word count: 242 words
Concrit?: Sure. :D
Pairing: YunChun
Rating: R
Summary: your skin is a map he draws x's on to mark a spot - your heart. (for dbsk_flashfic @ flashfic challenge 11: let dai)

( it's same old thing. )

c: let dai, a: onew

Comments 17

ianinna July 22 2008, 15:39:24 UTC

;o; yoochun.

onew July 23 2008, 14:28:09 UTC

♥

hoyah July 22 2008, 15:43:08 UTC

"i don't, either" might be more... correct? but idk, people don't always speak correctly. xD i have no idea if that was for effect

still wow! i loved this *-* oh yunchun... such a tragic couple

morninglory17 July 22 2008, 15:47:01 UTC

They really are a tragic couple...I'm not sure why that is. They just are.

onew July 23 2008, 03:28:57 UTC

thanks for the heads up, honey. edited. ;D

quiet_heartache July 22 2008, 16:05:30 UTC

O_O erm. angst?! idek! but great anyway, urgent...

tiny things:
'lips on your and' - yours?
'and a half-choked i love yous' - remove the a or the s?

lovely :)

thanks

onew July 23 2008, 03:29:17 UTC

oooh, thank you so much! missed those things. thanks for pointing them out! :D

samikitty July 22 2008, 20:05:40 UTC

it's same old thing. yunho's got his hands all over you (skin, body, heart) and you flinch,

ahhh~~ what a great opening line. *O* i love the style and flow of this. thanks for writing and sharing it! *O*

onew July 23 2008, 03:30:02 UTC

thank you so much! :D

emda July 23 2008, 02:23:31 UTC

YUNCHUN!!!!!
love it!!!

onew July 23 2008, 03:30:41 UTC

thank you! :D