the pages are all screwed up :: response to flashfic challenge 9: jamais su

[halfkissed]

Title: the pages are all screwed up
Author: dbdbyeah
Word Count: 270 words
Concrit?: yes, please.
Pairing: jaejoong / changmin
Genre: WANGST.

A/N: messy and... disjointed (?) idek. D: *apologizes profusely*

A/N2: no caps. i hope it doesn't annoy you. i'll fix it later... maybe.

Comments

[smellytofu]

hmmm i like the last paragraph and line
yeah i don't know what's happening but i felt the emotion

[halfkissed]

yeah i don't know what's happening

kyaaaaa. *bows in apology* at least.. you felt something. eeeeps.. sorry. xD

[azurehook]

The last line is killer. TToTT~

Oh the things one does for what is supposedly right, for security, for career.

and then one tries to justify that it's right when one is breaking inside.

I'm not sure if I got everything, or if I know exactly who's who (since I thought it was Jaejoong at the very beginning but now I'm thinking it's Changmin), but it all comes together at the end.

loved it <3333

[heliomax]

i am going to wait until you're asleep then steal your icon. okay.....don't stay awake.

[halfkissed]

O.O

i think you got it pretty well. *CLAPS* i love you so hard right now. someone understanding the swirl is making me happy. LOL. *HUGS*

[ycsbrain]

gah. [heart breaks]

it feels like the pov we see is jaejoong's cuz...min seems like the kinda person who..not exactly give up, but..knows when to leave. that it's a lost cause...xD

[halfkissed]

...i, can't quite think straight because of your icon. O.O

*DIES*

[ycsbrain]

the power of jae's crotch >:D

[kratynoi]

Oh.
That was so beautifully written.
I liked the disjointed nature of the story. It added to the overall affect. ♥

*sniff* Now to go cry in a corner. ;_;

[halfkissed]

*wipes your tears*

I liked the disjointed nature of the story.

aaaaa you do??? ♥ *glompschu*

[shinchul303]

Nice one. Stupid Changmin, heartbroken Jae.

[halfkissed]

YES. *clings and dies*