The waves keep on crashing (response to drabble challenge 17: post-it notes)

[onew]

Title: The waves keep on crashing
Author: Reeza (aoireeza)
Word count: 150 words
Concrit?: sure. :D
Pairing: YooSu
Rating: PG-13
Summary: In Bora Bora, they fall in love. (for dbsk_flashfic @ drabble challenge 17: post-it notes)

Comments

[halfkissed]

you always win me over and over again with your last lines. ♥

*wants to play hide and seek with yoochun, too. xD*

[onew]

thank you, bb ♥
LOL

[vrilly]

oh... ♥ this was sweet :)! Thoroughly enjoyed it.

[onew]

thank you! :D

[tumi18]

awww.. thats so sweet ♥♥

[onew]

thank you! :D

[thevirginia]

really pretty ♥ bora bora is the lovely ;;
it might just be me, but the 2nd and 3rd sentences starting with 'yoochun + verb' kind of broke the flow of the piece for me, and you have such lovely, flowy stuff..

[onew]

hmmm. really? thanks for pointing that out! i hope i could still fix that part since the word count restriction slays me all the time. ^^; again, thanks for the concrit! :D

[x_voracity]

yeah, word count kills me too XD~ i would have suggested you change the second one to 'he runs after junsu' but it seemed like you were trying to avoid the use of junsu's name, so idk. i didn't want to come off as 'THIS IS HOW YOU SHOULD WRITE >:O!!!' ^^;

[onew]

actually yeah, i was trying to avoid using su's name. but oh, it's okay. :D it's nice to get comments like these every so often. i'll just take note of that next time. ^^;

[jaeholife]

aww!!! sweet . thanks