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Evidence in Paint (Drabble Challenge 4: Paint)

Feb 29, 2008 17:41

Title: Evidence in Paint
Author: morninglory17
Word count: 100
Concrit?: I guess so.
Pairing: Jaesu
Author's Notes: This is my first drabble; 100 words is hard to do. But thanks for reading. >.<

( Evidence in Paint )

c: paint, a: morninglory17

Comments 8

kallistei February 29 2008, 23:13:59 UTC

Hahaha. Cute!

My concrit is mainly about presentation - a bit of white space between paragraphs would help divide the drabble better, and you don't need to capitalise Yoochun's words, since you tell us he's shouting.

morninglory17 March 1 2008, 02:47:23 UTC

Thank you. ^_^ I'll keep that in mind about the caps for next time. I know it annoys some people. >.

junsu_hyung March 1 2008, 00:31:16 UTC

OMG! THIS IS HYSTERICAL! I LOVE IT! ♥♥♥

morninglory17 March 1 2008, 02:48:15 UTC

Aww, thanks!!

wmelon_kaiye March 1 2008, 10:28:21 UTC

I think you did pretty well considering the fact that you were restricted to 100 words.
XD
This was cute.

kaypop March 1 2008, 11:03:59 UTC

lol

ianinna March 8 2008, 07:18:33 UTC

heee. ♥