*takes a hatchet and sings a song* I am going to kill yoooooooouuuuuuuuuuuuu~
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But haha, oh man, I think this is my favourite chapter yet, and all have been remarkably good, so this one is amazing. You did the sound four well, though, I did feel they lacked a certain aggression, but it isn't too noticeable, so don't worry about it.
The first part, SQUEE, SQUEE, SQUEE~! OMG I LOVE YOU! *humps* The Naruto-Sakura interaction was so well-done. Eeeeeeeeeeek, that makes me feel so inadequate as a writer. I can't even get the dynamics right and you wrote them so well! <333
Naruto was completely IC, you needn't worry about him anymore. He was amazingly written, so props for you. *loves* and Sakura and her concern over Sasuke, her family, amazing!
Loved the second part, about Sasuke's self-discovery and Genjutsu finding too. And...
-I’m sitting in a water tank, what do you think I’m doing? But I know you-your team was the one that killed Zabuza, wasn’t it? SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEE! SUIGETSU! <3333333333333333
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Noooooooo... *cries* Don't go, Sasuke! You know what's down that road! It sucks! *clings to him* Where the hell is Naruto, anyway? Shouldn't he have gotten back to the hospital by now? *glares at the slow boy*
...Ahahaha... I really like the chapter. It's very well characterized, as always, and I like the changes with the Sound Four meeting. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next! ^_^
Thank you! I'm really glad you liked the chapter :), and that the characterization is all right. ♥ Naruto and Sakura will get to the hospital... sooner or later. >_> :P
Seems that your writing block is finally over :) It's a good chapter. In some way it's kinda refreshing to see that Sasuke actually considers the offer instead of taking it immediately. Only that - once again his whole reasoning is wrong XD; Oh well, poor boy. If he wants to destroy his own life so much, nobody should stop him :P
Yes, I pretty much forced myself to write, and I suppose after a while I finally began to get into the flow of things. :) I'm glad you liked it--I always thought Sasuke was really caught up in the emotion of the moment and so neglected his reason (not that he really paid attention to reason in the first place XD), and even though he's more, uh, evaluative the second time around, mention of Itachi still sends his common sense out the door. :P
I really liked this chapter! :D I thought you handled Naruto's character beautifully. Sasuke, too, is very well done. I really wasn't expecting him to say yes to the Sound Four! XD I'm looking forward to more. ^___^
So, after months of procrastination and trying so hard to read your awesome fic but never getting around to it, I have finally caved in. I read all of the chapters, starting from the prologue up till now and I absolutely do not regret my decision. First of all, your writing style is gorgeous: you have an awesome flow going on and your writing is poetic - very visual and elegant. You capture that fine line of being eloquent, but not tediously descriptive (like moi, for example). There are so many one-liners, metaphors and smilies that I love in this fic - and that make the literature geek in me rejoice. Your work is also devoid of any grammatical mistakes which is a feat, considering that few authors seem to understand how the English language works. I'm jealous of your awesome English skills and your vocabulary
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Wow. *_* I don't even know how to begin to respond--I have to say quite honestly that you've practically made reviewing into a special literary art of its own. :DDD Your comment is so encouraging and thank you so much, it really made my day! :)
I love working with language (literature geek :P), and I'm so happy you think it's all right! Also, I think your description is quite lovely :), and please don't dismiss your own abilities!--you have a grasp of the English language that many (and I mean many) native English speakers don't have, and that's something very admirable. :) I'm glad you like the way I wrote Sasuke--I have to confess, I'm biased in favor of the present tense, so I enjoy switching between past and present tense to make things very muddled. :P And I'm also flattered you like my characterization of Naruto and Sakura--I worry about keeping them IC a lot, because I'm always a little apprehensive that I might make Naruto appear much more serious than he acts in canon. I'm pleasantly surprised you think my fighting scenes
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>8D~~~~~~~~~~~~~
But haha, oh man, I think this is my favourite chapter yet, and all have been remarkably good, so this one is amazing. You did the sound four well, though, I did feel they lacked a certain aggression, but it isn't too noticeable, so don't worry about it.
The first part, SQUEE, SQUEE, SQUEE~! OMG I LOVE YOU! *humps* The Naruto-Sakura interaction was so well-done. Eeeeeeeeeeek, that makes me feel so inadequate as a writer. I can't even get the dynamics right and you wrote them so well! <333
Naruto was completely IC, you needn't worry about him anymore. He was amazingly written, so props for you. *loves* and Sakura and her concern over Sasuke, her family, amazing!
Loved the second part, about Sasuke's self-discovery and Genjutsu finding too. And...
-I’m sitting in a water tank, what do you think I’m doing? But I know you-your team was the one that killed Zabuza, wasn’t it?
SQUEEEEEEEEEEEEE! SUIGETSU! <3333333333333333 ( ... )
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...Ahahaha... I really like the chapter. It's very well characterized, as always, and I like the changes with the Sound Four meeting. I'm looking forward to finding out what happens next! ^_^
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It's a good chapter. In some way it's kinda refreshing to see that Sasuke actually considers the offer instead of taking it immediately. Only that - once again his whole reasoning is wrong XD; Oh well, poor boy. If he wants to destroy his own life so much, nobody should stop him :P
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LOL, true XDD;; And it hasn't changed that much in the manga now XDD;
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I love working with language (literature geek :P), and I'm so happy you think it's all right! Also, I think your description is quite lovely :), and please don't dismiss your own abilities!--you have a grasp of the English language that many (and I mean many) native English speakers don't have, and that's something very admirable. :) I'm glad you like the way I wrote Sasuke--I have to confess, I'm biased in favor of the present tense, so I enjoy switching between past and present tense to make things very muddled. :P And I'm also flattered you like my characterization of Naruto and Sakura--I worry about keeping them IC a lot, because I'm always a little apprehensive that I might make Naruto appear much more serious than he acts in canon. I'm pleasantly surprised you think my fighting scenes ( ... )
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