SGA Fic: How Many Astrophysicists... (1/2) / John/Rodney / G

[darsynia]

Title: How Many Astrophysicists...
Summary: I really should have been paying attention, John told himself as he sat on a cracked Ancient console, gun on his lap, watching the foot-high water lap at the soles of his boots.
Characters: John/Rodney.
Rating: G this chapter, PG total
Word Count: 3,180 this part, around 8,000 in total
Notes: Part one of

Comments

[glaelia]

I liked this, but it's not clear what happened to Ronon? Did he walk off after he 'turned away'? Or did ya just forget about him in the second half? Cos it seems that way ;)

[darsynia]

The phrase 'turned away' was meant to imply that he left:

He caught Ronon's eye as the Satedan nodded at him and turned away

...but if you don't think it's strong enough, I suppose I can change it to 'turned to walk away' because that's what it's meant to stand for.

[glaelia]

Ah, makes more sense. I guess Ronon doesn't often wander off without purpose, that's all :) Maybe, turned away to find Teyla, or something like that :D I was imagining Ronon sat in the room watching them ;)

[darsynia]

Well, the bits after that where he's all 'whole sentences of 'You're welcome,' and 'Glad I could help,' and 'Anytime, Sheppard' contained in that single look' were meant to convey purpose. A wordless, 'you're all right then' before he walks away--cause sure, Ronon doesn't wander off without purpose, but he doesn't always talk when looks would work, either.

Sorry to disrupt your imaginings, though! Since I didn't say where he went, you could always imagine he stayed nearby and peeked in the doorway :)