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darkshield

{OOC} CRIT POST

Oct 15, 2025 21:44

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Have an OOC comment? Got a suggestion? Have a criticism to share? A plot to divulge? Here's where to let loose all the little burdens from your chest about Riku (darkshield).

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anonymous October 16 2008, 02:24:45 UTC

darkshield October 16 2008, 02:35:21 UTC

Was it mostly noticable in the comments I've posted on this journal? I can't say you're wrong, though I'll admit I wasn't too sure how to play this out. I'm picking him pretty much from the ending of KH2, and while he obviously still had issues with everything he'd done as well as the present situation, he felt (to me) more opened than he'd been during the entire game. I assumed he'd be completely confused when landing in the City, not thinking straight making him speak his mind out impulsively.

Do you have any examples though? Because I'd like to see exactly where I've done this, and fix it, or well, do it better anyway. Thanks for pointing this out!

[woops, fixed]

anonymous October 16 2008, 02:48:16 UTC

darkshield October 16 2008, 02:55:08 UTC

I've picked him right after DiZ's machine blows up. So he gets his true form back and wakes up in the City, learning all of a sudden that Sora's from his future and that there was another Riku before him. That and well... he's somewhere he shouldn't be while he assumes that Xemnas' let loose where he SHOULD be. You're right though, I don't think he should have been so open with Roxas, though given that Roxas isn't from his timeline either... well you know, I guess Riku's confusion got to me XD

Thanks for that, I know it may not seem like a big deal but I appreciate every single thing people can point out, big or small. I'll keep it in mind, thanks!