well. Constructive criticism. I like it. i want to see where you are going with this. However it felt rushed. IDK i just want to know if you wanted to write iC or OOC. Are we going to have it explained to us why Severus was happy Harry was there?
I know when i first started writing fics i wanted to get into my plot so fast i neglected to set the scene the feeling.
Well you have to remember, this was a dream. At least Harry thought it was, until he woke up. There are more parts to it, that will go more into detail.
What I was trying to do here, was show one of those dreams we all have from time to time. Unreal, fleeting,...and oh so yummy.
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Are we going to have it explained to us why Severus was happy Harry was there?
I know when i first started writing fics i wanted to get into my plot so fast i neglected to set the scene the feeling.
But i WANT MORE...
ok hope you arent mad at my suggestions.
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What I was trying to do here, was show one of those dreams we all have from time to time. Unreal, fleeting,...and oh so yummy.
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