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dark_gate fic: Mine Eyes Have Seen by Eve11

Dec 12, 2006 00:13

Title: Mine Eyes Have Seen
Rating: PG-13
Spoilers: Through "Meridian"
Author: eve11
Recipient: randomfreshink

Summary: They were three days out of Restia when news filtered down the line that Zeph's company had caught themselves a Black Rat.

Details: Team goes dark for a Meridian fix/AU. Gen. Many thanks to auntiemeesh for a patient beta on an impatient writer ;), and ( Read more... )

Comments 32

gunhilda December 12 2006, 17:24:10 UTC

Oh, very well done! Dark and delightful all at the same time!

eve11 December 12 2006, 23:02:30 UTC

Thanks very much :)

green_grrl December 12 2006, 17:56:38 UTC

This is all too scarily plausible. *shivers* Nobody's made a good decision, where imperfect decisions are the only ones that can be made.

eve11 December 13 2006, 00:33:33 UTC

This is all too scarily plausible. *shivers*

A lovely compliment! Thanks :) My work here is done :)

ex_which December 13 2006, 16:21:57 UTC

This is good, thank you for sharing.

Oh, Daniel. For a guy who's not technically an anthropologist, he's far too good at going native.

It's interesting to think of things that would make Teal'c refuse to fight beside Jack O'Neill.

PS Caladan was a bit confusing - it made me go WTF, House Atreides? I'm assuming it's not canon.

eve11 December 13 2006, 16:34:00 UTC

Thanks for your feedback!

PS Caladan was a bit confusing - it made me go WTF, House Atreides? I'm assuming it's not canon.

Oh my, I forgot about that. I was just taking names from vaguely Greek references because of the back story. I thought Caladan was the bad guy in Clash of the Titans, but apparently he was Calibos (oops). Atreides were supposedly descendant from the house of Atreus, greek lineage, so it's not completely out there, but ugh, I hate when that happens. :(

ex_which December 13 2006, 22:56:35 UTC

I get cross-universe bleed through sometimes too! Thanks for clearing that up.

eve11 December 14 2006, 00:42:46 UTC

heh. I could change the spelling, maybe with an 'i', Calidan... pronunciation is close enough and it might not jar poor Dune fans as much ;)

live_momma December 14 2006, 00:21:08 UTC

Wow. That was a fantastic premise. I happened to love the interaction between Daniel & Sam, and I didn't see what came next coming, but it was very believable.

eve11 December 14 2006, 00:41:42 UTC

Thank you very much! I'm glad the twist worked, and that even if it did come as a surprise, it was a plausible one. Jack was right; Daniel may not have been setting the bombs, but he certainly wouldn't sell out his trapped comrades either.

live_momma December 14 2006, 02:57:15 UTC

Er... I wrote that feedback on my way out the door, and I think the "happened to" changed the meaning slightly. It sounds kinda snotty, which totally wasn't what I intended. So, um, great job! Have some chocolate. ;-)

eve11 December 14 2006, 03:39:15 UTC

no problem; I didn't read anything in it as snotty, I basically just melted at the lovely feedback, and was also way too totally ecstatic that I didn't telegraph the ending ;) Thanks again! mmmmmm...chocolate...

katie_m December 20 2006, 22:27:28 UTC

Oh, well done; a dark happening done without making me roll my eyes at self-conscious darkness, if that makes any sense. I can believe in a Jack who would agree with Teal'c, but I can believe in this Jack just fine, too.

eve11 December 22 2006, 15:34:00 UTC

Thanks for your lovely feedback :) My outlook on this one was that the character darkness wouldn't change their small-scale behavior so much as it changes why they are doing what they're doing. So I tried to make them as familiar as I could, but they find themselves losing the forest for the trees. And I wanted to have that gray area too -- you can almost believe that any of them are totally in the right here, but there are underlying motivations too, that nobody is willing to admit to.