Fanaa fanfic

[dangermousie]

Title: Fanaa fanfic
Rating: PG I guess
A/N: I would really like some constructive feedback as I am not sure this even makes much sense. Of course, this spoils the movie.

Comments

[dangermousie]

Thank you so much for the feedback. And you are right about the 'are.' That's what happens when you reread but assume words there when they aren't because you wrote the darn thing so words must be there :P

[adhuri_roshni]

This is perfect and just how I think Zooni would react. And so well put!
She misses him and nothing she has learned will change that. That is the hardest thing to accept. She knows, and that knowledge is with her like a shadow, what he had done, what he was planning to do.

The ambivalence towards Rehan, still having another one, the ghosts of those she's lost, you've captured it all. The last line is amazing.

She can pick, so she picks Rehan she knew best Does there need to be a "the" before Rehan here or am I just up too late?

[dangermousie]

Thank you! (just came across that).