They have made a connection. I waver on how deep it can possibly be after knowing each other for such a short amount of time. I lean toward it being genuine, thinking of them as two people who just clicked
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Ugh. I basically feel bad for everybody. The feeling of the, uh, virtual end coming is very palpable. You've done well with making everyone feel a bit out of sorts. I like it.
I agree with 'We'd still be apart'. Yep, sums everything up in a very wrenching way...
I've decided that the next chapter will be the last and I'll include the epilogue along with it. I do hope the last scene between George and Annette felt natural to the progression of the story. I don't want the oddness/discomfort they are experiencing in this moment to come out of left field. They'd still be apart, pretty much sums it all up. What can be done, if anything?
It didn't feel like it came out of left field. All through the story there have been road signs that their time is limited, and now the reality has begun to set in.
The story is timeless. It's less common for people from two different parts of the world (literally and figuratively) to actually make a relationship work than it is for them to succeed. No matter how badly they both may want it. Call it a fond milestone for two young people. Just not meant to be, but what fun it was that they met and had some time together. Soon their individual lives will pick up again, and what will be left is a cherished memory.
It was difficult to not go for them running off together and getting married. It just doesn't work for this period in their lives. Oh, it'd probably be a fun read, but not realistic or connected truly to the story I've been writing for the last sixteen chapters.
They could have something later on down the road or as you put it this could be just a cherished memory for them of a lovely time they shared together. I'm pleased with the direction I took in this story, and it feels good to know that readers seem all right with the way things have gone.
Yep. Sometimes its just easier to let things fade rather than try to tie them up nicely. It just makes things more difficult on the writer and the characters.
You've done fine by them, particularly because everything is very plausible.
Ah….the tensions are escalating from the previous night’s events! The opening scene in the Debs hotel room was particularly riveting. At first, I was thinking, “poor George” when he walks into the midst of that “tempest in a teacup” until, that is, I find he’s still being rather petulant a short while later as he and Annette are discussing what had happened. I find myself wondering if he is more upset because he was “stuck” due to the contractual obligations, or because he felt that no one - Annette included - was backing him, OR because he was just increasingly disillusioned with the whole mania thing. Perhaps it was some combination of them all. It was sweet, though, and understandable, that Annette wanted so desperately to put things right with George. Nice touch the way you describe her lowering her head to make eye contact with him. It’s kind of a symbolic way of “meeting him where he is” - a demonstration of not just affection, but of respect. Before I forget to mention it again, I want to add that I also think it is
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I really enjoyed writing the group dynamics of the Debutantes and Howard. I didn't know going in that I'd get so into the politics within this trio and their manager. Its one of those pleasant writing surprises that you stumble onto
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I agree with 'We'd still be apart'. Yep, sums everything up in a very wrenching way...
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The story is timeless. It's less common for people from two different parts of the world (literally and figuratively) to actually make a relationship work than it is for them to succeed. No matter how badly they both may want it. Call it a fond milestone for two young people. Just not meant to be, but what fun it was that they met and had some time together. Soon their individual lives will pick up again, and what will be left is a cherished memory.
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They could have something later on down the road or as you put it this could be just a cherished memory for them of a lovely time they shared together. I'm pleased with the direction I took in this story, and it feels good to know that readers seem all right with the way things have gone.
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You've done fine by them, particularly because everything is very plausible.
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