fic: Oliver and Guiterrez part 1

Oct 06, 2010 22:58

Original fic. Rated R for violence, sexual content. Inspired by a trip to Thomas Jefferson's plantation. Title suggestions desperately needed.

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status: unbeta'd, fiction: original, status: wip

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undomielregina October 7 2010, 05:07:58 UTC
If you leave it there, I will find I way to kill you through the computer.

No, really, it sucked me in. I want to know what happens next :)

Con-crit-wise, I found the very beginning a little hard to get into, which was probably because it's light on character interaction. It was working for me by the end of the chapter, though, so I wouldn't worry about that much.

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dandelionlily October 7 2010, 05:43:39 UTC
Oh wow. I had no idea anyone was reading what I post here.

You know, I keep trying to get Oliver to talk to other people, but he goes off and angsts instead.

Btw, ANY ideas for a title? Trust me, my ideas are... ugh. They range the gamut from "muppet segments" to "dramatic-chipmunk level melodramatic" to "bad porno titles" without a single decent one in there.

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