the yoonsic here is how i peg their actual relationship to be, you know without the actual relationship. like they've both mentioned before that they're not particularly ambitious and kind of just goes with the flow; here yoona gives jessica her space and jessica lets her do it and neither of them are really the clingy type and doesn't bother to address the problem at hand. it's really nice to see how that dynamic attributes to their drifting apart here.
Thanks for commenting! I did try to base this relationship on how I read their real-life relationship, though Yoona has said that she's a pretty straightforward person. I decided that she might be the sort of person to walk up to Jessica to thank her and to be the more active one in the relationship, but if she really liked Jessica, perhaps she would've felt unable to come right out and say, "There's something wrong with us.", because love can paralyze you that way too.
hi, so hm... um... i just read the whole thing so far, you know... and i really really like the pace youve set, the timing and the speed of progression... very very nice job.
i like your vocabulary, and i don't get to say this too much, but your story is pretty authentically korean, you know the constantly going out, teeny tiny dorm rooms and of course the samgak kimbab and such... i really like the little bits of korean, its fun, pretty basic, i can definitely understand(once i figure out the romanizations lol)
but overall i'm a bit at a loss to where this is going, not that that's a bad thing, but its unexpected definitely not the stereotypical korean exchange student soshi fic.
Thank you for leaving a comment! It's my first on-going story, so I'm still feelin' my way around.
I do try to make the story come closer to what life is like in Seoul as an exchange student (or a foreign/gyopo student), but I realized that I don't really show Sica in the library or doing much work at all. Perhaps it's because I don't see her making that many friends XD
I've been asked if I'm making the story up as I go along! (I do know where it's going, even if I keep changing my mind as to what actually happens on the way...) Oh, and this is actually a follow-up story to "Every Right Turn, Every Left Turn" (http://dancesands.livejournal.com/6174.html), so reading that might help you see this as not just another exchange student fic XD
Rereading because I can xPy_n_kSeptember 25 2011, 12:16:29 UTC
(One lil formatting thing: The "i" in "unni" at the beginning isn't italicized.)
The "I love these lines" awards: - For "Most hilarious and in character line ever": "She ... looks like butter wouldn't melt in her mouth" ... "We look kind of alike, I suppose." - For "Truthful statement is truthful": "It's such a Yoona thing to do, to remain pretty even when she cries." - For "Best unsaid question": "Oh.. ?" Tiffany let the question trail off, and Jessica understood. - For "Best way to explain a feeling that can't be named, because nothing between YoonSic is *wrong* it's just ...": The whole passage describing the night before Jessica left for Seoul. So vivid, not just in imagery, but in emotion... I mean, you could've named an emotion. But feelings aren't as cut as dry as the words we use for them. To try and describe it I think is harder, but allows people to understand better and that scene really works in conveying all the layers of emotions ... - For "Awesome chapter ending is awesome": This one~~~~
Re: Rereading because I can xPdancesandsSeptember 25 2011, 14:08:48 UTC
*sobs into a hankie and waves down the orchestra* I'd like to thank the awards committee of one...
The first, second and fourth award-winners were in this chapter as soon as I thought of them. They were some of the easiest lines to write because they just came flowing out. It was fleshing out the story behind them that took me so long XD (The opening section took me a whole day of tweaking because starting and perfecting a section is always the hardest part, for me.)
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i like your vocabulary, and i don't get to say this too much, but your story is pretty authentically korean, you know the constantly going out, teeny tiny dorm rooms and of course the samgak kimbab and such... i really like the little bits of korean, its fun, pretty basic, i can definitely understand(once i figure out the romanizations lol)
but overall i'm a bit at a loss to where this is going, not that that's a bad thing, but its unexpected definitely not the stereotypical korean exchange student soshi fic.
okay bye.
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I do try to make the story come closer to what life is like in Seoul as an exchange student (or a foreign/gyopo student), but I realized that I don't really show Sica in the library or doing much work at all. Perhaps it's because I don't see her making that many friends XD
I've been asked if I'm making the story up as I go along! (I do know where it's going, even if I keep changing my mind as to what actually happens on the way...) Oh, and this is actually a follow-up story to "Every Right Turn, Every Left Turn" (http://dancesands.livejournal.com/6174.html), so reading that might help you see this as not just another exchange student fic XD
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The "I love these lines" awards:
- For "Most hilarious and in character line ever": "She ... looks like butter wouldn't melt in her mouth" ... "We look kind of alike, I suppose."
- For "Truthful statement is truthful": "It's such a Yoona thing to do, to remain pretty even when she cries."
- For "Best unsaid question": "Oh.. ?" Tiffany let the question trail off, and Jessica understood.
- For "Best way to explain a feeling that can't be named, because nothing between YoonSic is *wrong* it's just ...": The whole passage describing the night before Jessica left for Seoul. So vivid, not just in imagery, but in emotion... I mean, you could've named an emotion. But feelings aren't as cut as dry as the words we use for them. To try and describe it I think is harder, but allows people to understand better and that scene really works in conveying all the layers of emotions ...
- For "Awesome chapter ending is awesome": This one~~~~
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The first, second and fourth award-winners were in this chapter as soon as I thought of them. They were some of the easiest lines to write because they just came flowing out. It was fleshing out the story behind them that took me so long XD (The opening section took me a whole day of tweaking because starting and perfecting a section is always the hardest part, for me.)
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