Your BF edit!keppiehedAugust 12 2013, 23:29:32 UTC
Hello! I'm one of your editors this week.
This poem was full of sentiment! It's a great form for so much expression.
To punctuation suggestions come immediately to mind: "sky's" does not require an apostrophe, as it is not possessive. In this case, I think you mean "skies", but I think singular might be more appropriate. And also, when you begin to use contractions, such as "I'll", you should continue to use them throughout the entire stanza and not switch to "I will" in the next line. That will preserve continuity.
This was a nice use of the prompt. I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing! It is always a treat to read your work.
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It's horrid that it makes me remember too....
But it is a lovely quiet thinking/wondering.... that happens.
Thank you.
AND IT IS LOVELY TO SEE YOU BACK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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This poem was full of sentiment! It's a great form for so much expression.
To punctuation suggestions come immediately to mind: "sky's" does not require an apostrophe, as it is not possessive. In this case, I think you mean "skies", but I think singular might be more appropriate. And also, when you begin to use contractions, such as "I'll", you should continue to use them throughout the entire stanza and not switch to "I will" in the next line. That will preserve continuity.
This was a nice use of the prompt. I really enjoyed it. Thanks so much for sharing! It is always a treat to read your work.
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