Title: Win and Jim
Author: Danahid (
danahid)
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emluv Fandom/Spoilers: STXI/Reboot
Rating: PG-13
Characters/Pairing: Winona Kirk, Jim Kirk, brief Chris Pike cameo (Gen)
Wordcount: 2,148 (Part 3)
Disclaimer: Star Trek is owned by many people who are not me. No profit being made. No infringement intended.
Archive/Distribution: Please ask.
Date: January 22,
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Your feedback really has been so helpful, sweetie, you have no idea. It's helped me adjust and recalibrate every one of the sections of the story, and it was critically helpful in this section, where I went from scraps of prose and general, not-fully-thought-out ideas to a fully-fleshed out section that does bridge the gap in the story as I needed it to do.
THANK YOU so much again, for all your help and feedback and advice and encouragement. You are incredibly awesome!
::: hugs :::
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One of the core ideas of this story (it's even in the summary, I think) was that "Jim is a lot like his mother, except when he's not), and I'm thrilled that's coming across in this section.
Re: the car off the cliff -- I figure that everyone needs to tackle this rationalization at some point in their STXI fic-writing "career," and this was my version. Things said and unsaid, people talking or being quiet were an important image/motif in the story for me, so this:
everything Jim isn't talking about gets the better of him, and he drives his dead father's car into the Riverside Quarry partly out of frustration and boredom, but mostly in protest.
was the result of tying all my disparate threads together.
I'm so glad it worked for you!
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Maybe at some point I'll come up with a coherent and thoughtful feedback. For right now, all I have is that everyone is coming across as real, whole people. They're flawed and broken, and sometimes things just jump out and evoke such a visceral reaction. I can absolutely see this as Jim's backstory.
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I'm delighted that you think everyone is coming across as real, whole people. That was something I desperately wanted to do. People are complicated, and too often, people ignore just how complicated...
I'm honoured that you can see this as Jim's backstory. I would like it to be. :-)
Thank you again for your lovely comment!!
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The change in form to a fragmentary chronicle brilliantly showcases periods of darkness and blackout versus rare moments of open secrets (Winona's open eyes, her bringing her secretism to the table) in alternation; a theme with variations.
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I'm sorry that it made you cry, though!
::: hugs you :::
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