Comments | damnyouwentz: Good lord, am I on time? :[

agent99 in damnyouwentz

Good lord, am I on time? :[

Aug 04, 2007 21:30

Title: The Ballad Of Captain Obvious And Oblivious Boy
Word Count: Uh, like 4600ish
Author: agent99
Pairing: Patrick/Pete
Rating: Uh, PG-PG13 at the most
Summary: "Basically, Stump. You're a musical genius, but you're the biggest dumbass when it comes to the obvious" Bob stated calmly, going back to work on scorching their dinner.
Disclaimer: Not real.
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therisingmoon August 5 2007, 03:24:34 UTC

oh, i really liked this, how the girls (and bob) keep nudging them to go talk to each other.

agent99 August 5 2007, 03:42:25 UTC

Aww...yeah, the poor boys. So oblivious to what's right in front of their faces, even with everyone telling them. Thank you sweetie! You made the way I'm attacking my nails with my teeth a little less brutal

not_nele August 5 2007, 04:25:16 UTC

I was sold from the opening lines. The Anna/Patrick breaking up scene was perfect as told from Patricks POV. With his not actually knowing why this was happening but being forced into movement anyway. Very nice.

agent99 August 5 2007, 04:35:50 UTC

Patrick just strikes me as the kind of guy who goes with stuff, even if he's got no idea what the hell's going on. Thank you sweetie :D I really, really, really appreciate that :D

eckerlilas August 5 2007, 04:53:36 UTC

Ooooh darlin', this was le awesome. Psh, you write like an old pro! :D

Also, the descriptions of the muggy south make me think of home. All I'd have to do is walk out my front door and be accosted by the very weather conditions you described.

Loved this, so much. Now, off to bed with me!

<333

agent99 August 5 2007, 05:09:28 UTC

Oh :-[ hah i'm blushing like an idiot, thank you so much! Hah, yes we know all about muggy southern summers around here, don't we? :-[ yeah, looking forward to not having a sauna every time i take the dog out to pee. but ah, thank you!!!

and yes, off to bed with you! pats toosh. go go...

nimmy August 5 2007, 11:05:13 UTC

This fic has a feeling of time and distance and slowness that's really hard to capture. I felt like I should be reading slowly, you've given it reverence, especially the part in Africa. Lovely.

agent99 August 5 2007, 11:13:47 UTC

Ah :[ yeah, I hoped i had captured that well enough, because I wanted this to span over time, but it's not really very easy to do it without it coming across as choppy and ruining the flow. so i'm really happy you enjoyed it lol :-[

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agent99 August 5 2007, 16:10:53 UTC

Insert very pleased sounds here! Good, good! I fretted over it constantly, I wanted this exact reaction, so YAY im so glad i got it! and yes, I'm a sucker for the banter, the unresolved tension, the "oh shit, i've *insert emotion* you for years..." stuff, so that part was actually fun for me to write, i'm just glad something coming from my brain was actually considered artful! hehehehe, and you're so welcome!