Fic: Foreplay (Jack/Sawyer, AU)

[cynthia_arrow]

Random Friday fic, because we all know that Kate’s muse likes to time things so she posts when there are no readers. Anyway, I'm going to make a valiant effort at staying off LJ this weekend, to air out my brain a little and to get some work done, and I wanted to post this before I did

Comments

[inthekeyofd]

I. LOVE. YOU!!! Oh Christ you made Jack a musician, if you had made him the drummer I would have eloped with this fic..*hot damn!!!*

You know what I love, it's Jack that is actually the agressor, it seems that Sawyer will be at first, but Jack is just so full of surprises..and look who ended up on their knees..oh Sawyer aims to please. *smile*

And the dimples..SEE THERE IS GOLD IN THEM THAR DIMPLES, he knows it, I mean come one, anyone with a pulse is totally and completely incoherent when they look at those..and Sawyer didn't even have to flash them full strength.

And can I just add this..JEALOUS!JACK at the end and Sawyer calling him "sexy" I don't know why that's hot, but it is.

I just love your writing, who else can write Sawyer so confident--and a neat freak--and Jack seeming a little timid and by the end of the story it's almost like it's reversed, Sawyer is Sawyer, but in a way, Jack is Sawyer too. I hope that made some sort of sense.

I loved it!!

[cynthia_arrow]

Now, see, if I'd've known you had a drummer fetish...

Well, I probably wouldn't have changed it anyway. Jack just seems like a bass player to me. I AM a little sad I missed my chance at true happiness. :)

There's been a lot of talk lately about how hot the jealousy thing is, so I thought I'd indulge a bit. Glad you liked it. Thanks!

[siluria]

Well I'm incredibly happy your muse decided to hit you with an au at 12.30 in the morning!!! And what an AU... damn. Very hot. I was nodding furiously in agreement with your line about the bassist playing to the drummer too, they do have a tendency to do that don't they?! But hot. Very hot. Yummy.

[cynthia_arrow]

Thanks so much! :D

thank your muse for me please.

[keyweegirlie]

My brain has been slowly frying for the last couple of days, because of the luau....but this fic? You have successfully surpassed everything else and officially KILLED me! I'm so totally dead.

Let's see...
Jack? (check)
Sawyer? (check)
bartenderSawyer? (check)
nervousJack? (check)
neatfreakSawyer? (check)
musicianJack(let alone a BASSIST!) (DOUBLEcheck)
then the sex....WOW! (would it be wrong to say...thank you for Sawyer?)
then jealous!Jack (check)

You hit all the good kinks...and I'm a Sawyer girl, but this Jack? Holy Hell...thank your muse for me please.

~C~

Re: thank your muse for me please.

[cynthia_arrow]

You'll start out a Sawyer girl, but Jack will slowly win you over...at least in fan ficiton. You become obsessed. :)

I'm happy to have found so many of your kinks! Thanks so much for your comments.

[zelda_zee]

Wow, you are on a roll! You've been posting so much fic lately!

Jack as a musician, I just love that. And a bass player, which perfectly suits him.

I love it when you write AUs, I really do.

Love the long drawn-out flirtation, the dancing around each other, Jack playing for Sawyer, Sawyer thinking it was gonna be a bit of rough in the alley, and then Jack being the one to make it into something more. And the sex, just yummilicious, as always.

I so enjoyed this - what a great way to start the weekend!

[cynthia_arrow]

You've been posting so much fic lately!

*cringes* I know. I'm becoming a nuisance, aren't I? :)

You know, I can see those painstaking elements of Jack's personality making him a good musician, as well as his magic doctor hands, but I have a hard time believing he's got enough rhythm. But I really did think he had the bassist vibe.

I'm glad you liked it. AU's aren't a lot of people's cup of tea, but I like them. Thanks for reading it.

[eponine119]

OK, this was hot. I love the descriptions in this, right from the first line. They're detailed without making me want to skim, lush and luscious.

He was also, more than likely, the last man in the world to respond to dimples.

I loved that, as a characterization. I also thought the "sodomy state law" line was very, very clever. Great story.

[cynthia_arrow]

Oh, I have such problems with prose as opposed to dialogue. But occasionally it'll just happen, with little editing needed. Especially if I stop trying to narrate every freakin' move each person makes.

I say all that to explain why I'm glad to hear the description was interesting and not too dense to bear. Thanks for the feedback, dear.